Destined to Depart

Destined to Depart
By: Nash

Hear Me Out ..
to the grandmas, grandpas, fairly greats & involuntary ingrates
get ya hands raw, cuz it's unsanitary fates i speak of so late ..
i rejuvinate myself, i need help, counseling for the matter
cuz everytime i see my surroundings ..underground things get sadder
a grandma has a stroke ..grandpa chokes ..friend hangs from a rope
little girl gets groped to hard, & a fat kids self esteem loses it's hope
we fall down the steep slopes, still we seek hope ..but nope, it's gone
our loved ones lose hope, & there's no reason for us to live on ..

Complicated Words ..
but my simplicity relieves the authenticity of my head, but don't decieve
the words in my mind. cuz decieving isn't believing, & you'll be left behind
my mind speaks fluently of congruently battered & shattered brains ...
i sincerely hope dearly that the world sees to a degree we're all insane
would we kill for a name? a family member we love? one we selfishly
keep from above. we seem to shove the memories away, and decay slowly
it hurts to lose.. i'm weeping, but if you think i'm keeping her from heaven
you ALL can be headin' to BLOW ME ..

The Burning Aunt ..
i'll say to the people, that beneath you'll pray in sin ..but i can't begin
on the burnin` that was foretaken from the breakin` of my aunts skin ..
cuz within her are scars of department, my heart meant to heal the sad
the microscope on this aunt was too hard to cope to NOT turn out bad
i'm so glad that the fire burned out before i was born. but it's been worn
into my head how she was scorned to be dead, i mourn at what's said ..
but to behead the skin of an unsaved loved one, slaves to wrinkle my bed
cuz WE are not made men, we need to heed the warnings & repent ..
.. as my burning aunt stands by & just shakes her finger with a head

Closure for Sin ..
we reign in vein across an ocean so plain, but with all the same devotion
speaking metapohrically: if not the desire to burn, then apply your skin lotion
meaning, cleanse the evil motions. to defend against bad notions ..
make sure the cure is potent ..
.. to the one we love so dear. our relatives lost, our families raped & seared
i fear, that we don't hear what we want ..so around the corners we peer
then a cereal killer rips off an ear ..& committs more to the omitt of his life
sitting in his house back home, this lone wack job already killed his wife ..
his strife has lessened, weighed down by a knife full of sin ..
.. but who cares of kin? when we all die someday ..it's what's destined within

meh, had a different outtake on some things on my mind. most of this is metaphorically speaking towards loved ones and deaths of ANYONE in general. sorry if my ramblings are disturbing or confusing in any way possible. enjoy ..

Links Soon ..

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=298828
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...99#post4653299

Forums fucking up and i needed to edit some things in my verse, but oh well ..get em later i guess ..it won't allow me to edit. here's links.

well.......lets see....it sounds like you were writing about people that have died or other tragedies that have occured in your life...if that is so...then that sucks, sorry......on to what i thought about it, its not my favorite piece of work ive read from you but as you said you took a different approach to this piece and i could tell as soon as i started reading.....the internal rhyme scheme and the scheme overall was great the entire thing flowed so good together that i didnt have to read a line twice or stop and try to find the flow of it or the rhyming it was very prevalent as i was reading which made it an easy and somewhat enjoyable read. I think you always come dope on the vocab, you used that to your advantage but didnt go too far with it like how some kids do and use ginormous words that i dont even know what they mean. as for the topic itself i didnt like, im not a big fan of 'death' topics cause thats what like everyone seems to write about and i wouldnt have read it if it wasnt yours. overall goodjob, if some of what i wrote doesnt make sense i am very tired...its 6 in the am...but i read and didnt want to put it off so before i keep rambling im gonna stop........cya bye.

oh yea...when i seen the 'sub title' the burning aunt, i laughed.......i dont want to offend you but for some reason it made me laugh and i read that whole section first.........sorry if your aunt actually was caught in a fire......cause i know what its like...i have a burning cousin.......cya bye.

^^^uppin this for cry cause when i posted it didnt up the thread.

Thanks 40 ..BUMPNESS ..

alright you alwasy leave great feedback on my pieces, and i always get caught up n forget to give ya the fb ya deserve so enjoy...

The emotion was easily identified in this piece from start to finish whether it was a true or just a general piece, you did a great job of writing from an emotional stand point that imo rlly showed in most your lines. you had some nice descrptive words taht really carried some lines above the others...and made it more interesting. The thing i appreciated most about this piece however, is with the emotion/imagery you tied in a very different but well rounded structure that was based of some mad metaphorical meanings..and the main thing..your use of internals and rhymescheme...i thought you were creative with most ur internals etc...and it kept the slow sad moving words to a very up paced enjoyable flow....sometimes random ramblings are the ones that move people the most, because its coming not only from your mind but ur heart n soul aswell...usually when u write something that just comes straight from you its means a lil more ya know.....i thoroughly enjoyed what you had to write..and have to say ur last verse was my favorite overall but each one had its lil spice of life to make each verse worth the read.

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