Originally Posted by +AffIzIaL+
I look to a mear reflection.
That drives slow to a pale faced invision
^ alright
Mirrored to reaction imposed
as i poise to arouse, my feelings started to rot, i froze
^ good
Driven to insanity with scars galore
as i fend to the corner as rich dont fend to the poor
^ awesome, was pretty ill wordplay too
drawn with all emotional tears derailing
as my progression in expression to hold on is fading
^ good
i grit my teeth in depression
as pressure build and grows everyone still hates,no acception
^ nice, good feeling
eye's get water'd with emotions and pain
as the thunder strikes attention all the fears drop like rain
^ great metaphor, nice wordplay (thumbs up)
slain toa game that's played with a name
not endured with brain as the thoughts are lost in a broken frame
^ good
i pound the ground and shh!..no sound
as the people walk a side step around,i just laugh as i fall down
^ again, great, nice use of wordplay
i cry for help yet none is given
its like im trapped in a never ending circle with no mercy given
^ great level of feeling, really pulls it off
no heart to append and no home to cover
forgotten dreams re-assure my lifes long lost hidden lover
^ great
my heart is crushed with great aggresion
in depression, as my whole life and dreams is nothing more than a shattered reflection
^ great feeling, great wordplay yet again, which pulled off this nice closer
