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Please Understand.
It doesn’t matter what you say, Il still love you any way
Every minute of every hour of every day, Ill be wondering if your ok
Why cant you just be my friend, Why wont this shit just end
It doesn’t matter what’s been done, everything we did used to be fun
Once I dreamed we watched the sun, but I smile and you laugh and turn
ever since I said I love you girl, its like your in another world
What’s this about you, not liking what I do
Its hard but baby I can change, its going to sound strange
But please lets give it ago, lets not take it fast well take it slow
I love you more then I can ever show, every day I love you more and more
I cant help but be me, just why cant you see
That baby were meant to be, with out you all ill ever be is empty
I haven’t got the key to your heart,I cant stand it when were apart
i love you, i love you, i love you, i hope you say you love me too
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Kinda More Of A Poem I Think... But Other Than That, A Really Good Topic. Good Emotion Of The Guys Feelings Towards His Girl. The Vocab Could Be A Bit Better. The Structure Was Good, Flow Was Good. Being Longer With The Lines Might Be A Good Idea. Because I Kinda Feel You Only Told Half The Story. But WhatEver.. Good Job
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Yeah I thought it was more poetry, I didn't like your rhyming, you didn't have good vocab, the emotion I thought was missing in this piece, is was too short, and too vague, a lot of the lines were weak, and I didn't feel like they really meant anything, if you changed some lines and put it in more of an open mic structure, I'm sure it'd be good...
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its was ment to be a pop song but since i started to do oms i thought i could put it in here......and the ryme skeme isnt ment to be like that they wer ment to be short so the 1 line with to lines in it was 2 lines originally so i put um together to make it longer
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it was an ok drop.....i liked it.....sounds like you have serious affection for whom ever your talking about.....the lines were good and it rhymes well......vocab i thought there was no problem there.....and imagery and emotion was there throughout.....overall a good drop keep going!....
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