Twisted Concepts

rejections and approvals made my world circle round and round
until one day i came back to life and my words hit the ground
but i refuse to choose the path of my thoughts escapin my grasp
cause some day the truth will come out and make it free at last
witnessing ecounters made me realize that life is bigger then death
i hate myself cause its this site i turn to get this off my chest
my mind keeps collapsing due to this life's neglects
dropping these OM's to get my respect
got a poor mind for growing up around rejects
but im one myself so therefore i accept
what i am and all the challenges that follow
create a pillow of comfort when life gets hard to swallow
at times i feel stranded at sea with this letter in a bottle
hoping somebody would recieve it....then read it.....
then find it in their hearts to believe it...

it was god at first then it left me thinking it went a bit off topic
this is negatable try keepin it fresh

yopu had some ill shit but yeah you did fade out just keep the concept as the main focal point