RealTalk-Brandon & Nique.

Brandon

I know specifically... that the poor so diligently,
race against the grain... strugglin for the fame of the enemy...
is it me... truthfully... educated n' backwords,
can it be, the books that raised me... written before blacks were free...
segregation still stands as the norm, planned us to mourn,
torn from the flesh... land... blessed man... shown to scorn...
watch the scheme when we ride hard,
cause you don't know that we walk over the roads that other negros died for...
stress here... yes we're... runnin in place n'
waitin so patiently... for the damn day that next check clears...
what can I say to em, cept blast out they cranium,
they scream ya name loud... when you stage dive out the stadium...
we aint weak... shit... rebound on the cowards,
slave niggas... only seek 5.25 an hour...
they some pussies, this bullshit is sickenin,
while they watch their bills stack... n' yours get you evicted...

Nique

It's so appalling it's... a risk to want to abolish it
Suffering from headaches getting beat by the stick of politics
An ill will to our people, and we appear to be feeble
Just because we ain't shackled doesn't mean we are equal
Where killing is lethal and helpful action is lacked
And every considerable downfall's a whiplash to our backs
We've established that blacks in time are still opposed
In a race where white's were winning years ago
Making amends in hopes to hide the truth
When most of us work as janitor's.....survival proof
In the eyes of whom attempt to stage the pullin
By whites who ancestors raped our women
So we've appealed, lost, years later, we're still off
From being more than inferior...and it's realtalk

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=296135

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...75#post4567275

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=295995

Brandon - i have to say i enjoyd your entire piece, but your first half was a little more serious then your 2nd in a sense of your wording...however i enjoyd it..it was definetly real talk and how you feel on the subject so its straight and i respect that..you had some nice wordplay, good flow a lil different structure/rhyme scheme which made it original and it all went well together...overall you dropped some very thought out lines, and at the same time you said some real ish....



Nique - with yours i loved your first few lines it started your verse off very strong...you had nice word usage, wordplay, vocab..flow etc...you had strong worded lines that had meaning behind it...then i liked how you eventually tied the topic into your piece to give it a nice closing thought...you were able to keep your piece similiar and you hti the topic nicely.

overall - you both hit the topic, and you had ur verses tie 2gether nicely....very nice short n sweet drop

keep ups

stupid sexy... but our government names... foreal..?

Not bad, topic seems to be quite unoriginal but nevertheless, you both played it well. The flow was what I liked about this piece the most, everything flowed right into one another, and the way you constructed each verse was good, couldn't of been better. There's only one thing I'd say to work on, is originality, like I said above. Most people (normal people) would want to see something written that they've never seen before, or a totally different approach to a topic that noone else would think of, know what im saying? Keep at it though guys, good work.

^in response... we could have done alot with this topic... a shit load... trust... but... its... REAL TALK. Think about it. and so you know... people don't want to see shit they never have before... they don't want to hear anything new... if they did... then the country... music... television... cars... clothing and a shit load of other things wouldn't be the exact same as they were roughly 20 years ago.




























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