That's How It Is

Immigration and Naturalization
working hard to exile
my family and me out of the nation
the united states is built on racism
though they still want me to fight
but fuck the patriotism
I'm not going to listen to the senseless shit they feed to me
telling me it's ok to bleed
for the war in the middle east
but its considered a crime in these streets
Im a part of the message
from us troubled teens
send us a blessin cuz we stressin
can't you see nessesary by all means
this is stamped with urgency
cuz my siblings back home have no currency
and thats currently
and now even my brother is stuck
in a life of drugs
and does'nt know as a thug
your destined for a slug
and we dont choose to be outcasts
we live like this cuz
we dont know how long our life will last
so like rats we travel in packs
cuz when you wander alone
you find you get trapped
by the other hungry cats
just remember homie
this aint the end
cuz when we die
we all going to heaven

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This was an aight OM, had a freestyle flow therefore the rhymescheme was neglected in many parts, the structure needs working and you have to tighten the form. Overall, this was a good piece, a good start but you are very raw right now, i see potential but i also see hard work to gain that potential.
Keep it up

Your feedback sucked on other peoples OM's.
Closed.