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-For Those Who Question-
For those who question,tha weight and tha direction
is that my reflection,no connection to no affection
childhood problems past,foggy view through tha glass
iced over and smashed,as im wading through tha gash
for those who question,there intellect and there beauty
sex appeal and there booty,the drugs are not computing
young minds defined confusing,alligned in time amusing
for those who question,peoples religions and there faith
quick decisions to be made,with your judgement to invade
no physical proof,invisible spiritual truth,invisible to you
for those who question,why should we accept diversity
different races spread commercialy,people with no adversity
for those who question,when is the end,should we repent
are we supposed to defend,fall to our knees to make amends
commend those who pray,who have something to believe
who can go to bed at night,and not have to fight to breathe
for those who question,every thesis created to tha fullest
many directions that they pull us,brains as active as a bullet
for those who question,there own beliefs and own direction
to lose there paths and gain depression,remains suppresed in
weighted sections,they live there life detained and guessin
spoke to soon in vain this lesson,for my agressions investment
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are u saying its a good thing to question everything, or a bad thing- i got confused, i THINK theres a weight of intelect here, but it may have been accidental, lol-
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The vocabulary is delightful and when the rhyme scheme is good, its great, but when its bad...its horrible. The build up to the end was better than the end, U should finish stronger. Pretty good though.
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Alright Nice lil verse here. I'm loving your perspective/view on the Topic. It had that message in there and those the kin dof Topical verses I really like, the one with hidden messages. Uh You went straight to the point. You have stretch lines, shorten them, use less syllables. Vocab was good, don't use too much,keep it at a balance. The character/narrator in your piece had this comfortable emotion, the feeling in your verse was 'tone' if you get what I mean. The complexity was nice. Eh good verse, keep it up. Peace.
-JC.
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this was an old verse but i had to put it down.....its oldschool...up.
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WOW !!!! *his eyes glow in amazement*
This piece was a great one...the flow was crazy and the multi's were all over the place.....The topic was good and you followed it up with some pretty good views on things....loved the different aspects.....ya voacb was nice and you i didn't feel that you forced anything anywhere....Overall I'd say Damn GOOD ......KEEP IT UP......
What's up with a collab ? got a topic ? Somethin tight 4 da CREW !!! get at me...
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For those who question,tha weight and tha direction
is that my reflection,no connection to no affection
childhood problems past,foggy view through tha glass
iced over and smashed,as im wading through tha gash
luv tha way u opened this
this was a really good piece
flow was pretty ill it didn fall off at to many points
ur vocab was nice u had some nice wording
ur creativity was iight this piece gets done once and a while
imangery was pretty good i wasent imprised by that
topic was ok like i said alot of ppl write on this kinda topic but urs stood out kinda this was an overall good piece i liked this alot keep it up
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this is a really good peice nice vocab and ryhmes
but the structure could use some work
and it had an very intelligent theme to it
good work keep it up
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i appreciate it.......up..
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