The Seed.

..The Seed..

Rotten to the core, the spoiled seed
Bleeding into the streets
The heartbeat of greed
melted into the souls of trauma
When you can’t nudge your pride
… there’s no room for honor.

Try n’ Seek out a shard of light
The darkness shrouded by blight
No end in sight…
The lost children mill about in spite

It started with minor dark deeds
Pleased to break and shatter
Torn matter to shreds to feed the sensations
Life aint right, delirious mystery, no mission

Lead soaked in blood
I live by the sharpened blade
Climbing hills covered in mud

My peers ate the smiles
Deep infested digestion of wonder
The phone whispers dials
File down the ingrained brain
Downfall of an idea
Seal the deal written on burned parchment
Resent each department

Everyone I know, dead
Or fed to an undesirable mix up
Stitched up , can’t feel licks
After a few more thoughts
Ill ramble, rain n droughts

The world spins
The ribbon trips and passed
At last the sunlight hits the sin bin

v/NICE

I liked the whole piece...I am guessing it wasn't supposed to rhyme...so besides that...really nice stuff here. I magery was nice...you put it togehter for me well in my mind...overall good job...8.5/10...keep going...nice shit.

Nice Piece!!! This is great poetry...elabaorate in many ways, it truly leaves the reader to intereprate things for his or herself...I liked this piece alot...It has sooo much to offer...its a clear display of good poetry...Im drunk an all but It got me to think deeply...peace...

If you get a chance hit me up on my latest piece...your feedback is greatly appreciated...
These Are The Times
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=293356

hehehe drunk fool :)

thanks Leet...

woot.

nice piece, didnt feel much emotion in it but still. your imagination was great, i can picture this quite vividly, plus you rhyming and structure are somehow perfect it flows very nice. as for the message itself, its good, nothing too complicated but still on a very respectable level.

best part of this was your opener, fucking dope


Rotten to the core, the spoiled seed
Bleeding into the streets
The heartbeat of greed
melted into the souls of trauma
When you can’t nudge your pride
… there’s no room for honor.


could you now please RTF :p

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292889

up.

im climbing into your brain... get the step latter ready.

ill poetry....vocab was ill...not to complex but still ill...your ordplay and structure was tight....no real rhyme scheme except for here and there...but still ill never the less......i dig your wordplay in this piece alot though....i really enjoyed every aspect of this piece in general...keep droppin tha hottness.~1~

good poetic peice. i was feeling it.
nice topic. excellent vocab usage.
flowed very well this was really good.
keep it up. peace~