Second Coming

Second Coming

Regular – First Coming
Italics – Second Coming

I was conceived on the eve of indecision,
With the world unfurling like a pin-less cushion
There was chaos and pain,
Deranged killers, torture and rape
Corruption; insane, people being slain
By the hands of the kind that I came to save

I was a slave to the world
Engraved in the brains of all things to hate
I gave victims a chance to relate
To all the rareness that made them great
Fate led me here; it’s where I stand
Holding your life in the palm of my hand

I watched the world pass me by
Doves learned to love, learned to fly
I gave sight to the blind
I was aesthetic to the apathetic mind
People loved me; I was king in my head
I even raised the dead to bow by their beds

I shed but a tear for those men
As I led my people to put them under again
They listen to me, the works that I speak
Don’t have to justify the things that I seek
I prayed for the weak, but I was betrayed
So I gave all my pain to the people I saved

I carried the burden up a mountain
Felt the accusing eyes
I was, tossed aside as I prayed to God
And I, thought about life…
As my palms were nailed to the cross
I thought of what could be, not what was lost

I’m back with a cause,
To remind the world of the hate and suffer;
How I tried to guide, and how they held me under
Now I’ve risen again, and there’s nothing to do
Call me Hitler, new king of the Jews
Back to reclaim this crown of thorns
Reborn;

Now Nobody knows if I’ll ascend or descend
but I’ll avenge my deaths and be here to the end.

Regular – Jesus
Italics – Hitler

*This is a piece regarding the Jew's betrayal of Christ, and Jesus returning as Hitler to claim revenge and avenge his death.

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this was a pretty good piece
it had alot of emtional feel to it
what i liked best about this piece was da flow
it flowed really well

it was good u got big words that makes ur message more powerful so keep that up and the flow was nice

yeah it was a good drop, like dark shadow said, the flow was dope thatz also my favorite part of it, and the structure was also good
the vocab you used was good too, the only thing i didnt like was the topic but dont trip i aint hatin', it just wasnt my type of thing you know? but anyway the image you gave was also so good~l8erz

i posted this piece on rv... 3 weeks with 1 feedback.. wow.

It was good. topic was alright.
flow was nice.rhymes were good
nice emotion throughout.
overall this was good.

thanks...................

This Piece Was Crazy On The Metaphorical Tip..
I Liked It A Lot, Its Not Really My Topic Of Choice
Either, But You Made Me Like It Cuz It Was Dope..
I Read It Once, Got To The End, And Read It Again
Know Who Was Who, And All I Can Say Is This.. Dope.

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I liked this piece allot man. i wont quote anything because all of it was dope. the emotion present within was good and i think that you carried the story well with good use of structure.. the structure of telling the story from 2 points of views? if thats what it is was nice.. the use of hitler as jesus's ressurection is new to me.. and most likely to other people. nice vocab as well.. nice topic good drop.

Good read. Metas were dope, structure and flow was dope. I think the creativity was what made me want to keep reading. Overall a good drop.