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Heart Of Stone
Heart Of Stone
The bird’s flock, the world stops in shock
A single shot, causes all hearts to drop
And all souls to vanish, and disappear eternally
Maternity wards, are covered with whores
The world’s core, is rotten, no happiness anymore
World leaders, encourage racism and war
The doorway to hell, as been left ajar
The sweetest food, has now turned sour
Nothing we say can ever bring back the lost
Riposte, has been granted………..at a cost
As old man winter weeps, and Lady summer cries
The veterans of war, lay down and die
Nuclear warheads, guns bombs, lives gone
The night’s long, the bright dawn, no longer shines on,
Ahead of the population, we have a group of impatient
And hastened, people, the last goodbye is belated
For this is the tragedy, that we all have awaited
Everyone is hated, everyone is discriminated
Against, war has flattened us all, forced us down
Towns, blown up, we have no where to go now
Nothing makes sense, nothing has a meaning
We all know, this time there is no healing
The wind blows, the grass grows, time froze
When psycho’s covered a world with their sideshows
The T.V shows bloodied soldiers, killing innocent men
They whisper to them, that this is the end, and cut off their head
Where does this evil come from? why can’t we live in Peace?
Why can’t the killing cease? Or stop for a while at least?
We kill and torture, blow each other up with mortars
The government orders, fall deaf in the ears of soldiers
With boulders on their shoulders, war just makes them colder
The hate will not smoulder as they get older
It sometimes seems, that from hell we all have grown
We must have a God with a heart of Stone
The end of the world comes, as Satan laughs like a Muppet
Because he knows that we are nothing else but his puppet
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seriously dudes don't fucking sleep on this!!!!
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word, this is getting way too slept on
deep shit, ya had alot of nice metaphors and meaning in the lines. flow was a short, abrupt one, which sounded good for most of the piece. ya rhyming structure and technique was tight, made it sound really nice. and the topic was dope too, and the ending was tight.
real nice drop, my man. stay at it
return feedback on mine, they gettin' slept on too
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dope closer man. real nice read overall. i don't believe i've read your work before. interesting style. you used a great amount of multies. it made for a great read, although some areas could use some work in flow. best part of the verse was its emotion and imagery. topic is a bit played, but you did a good job on it nonetheless. and as I said, your best line was the closer. great job.
hit my piece up when you see it.
thanks.
peACE
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This was a very good piece, the multiple rhymes enhanced the lyrical content higly and the way you writ it was excellent to. The bold parts practically co-existed with the verses and were a good addition, like a soliliquey or something. The 3 plots all added up to make the main plot and did so extremely well. Overall, a very good piece and it should work for you in the writers den.
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word, this is getting way too slept on
deep shit, ya had alot of nice metaphors and meaning in the lines. flow was a short, abrupt one, which sounded good for most of the piece. ya rhyming structure and technique was tight, made it sound really nice. and the topic was dope too, and the ending was tight.
real nice drop, my man. stay at it
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Couldn't word it better.....This shit was dope...
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