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Articulate Creativity
I had grasped for the Sun, but the sky was out of my reach
So I reached for the stars with a magnified power of speech
Agile words took flight far beyond the mountains and peaks,
And flew above that range for a span of thousands of weeks
Surely, every word was heard, the moral bounced in the streets
But not a soul listened; the message was drowned by their sleep
So then I dropped down on my knees, almost proud of defeat.
I knew He would give me the answer I hadn’t found on my keep.
But silence became the sound of deceit; I was forced to listen
Becuz my vision was clouded by the fact no one paused to listen
As I attempted the page, I know our lives are destined to change,
But I can’t help but think of lost friends as each memory fades
A slave of life, thin line between living and dead like day and night
Angels grant life and in death our souls morph into a ray of light
That same light brightens the path where truth is held behind in a mask
I can endlessly read the bible in hopes to hold his sight in my grasp
But each day I find myself fighting the wrath, like a titan of brass,
Where my future constantly sees the fuse and ignites up my past
Why’d they set sail in an ocean with the probability of a lottery pick?
Did it have to be them? Is there a better place or a bottomless Pit?
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this is quite decent homie
structre=dope
vocab=decent
multis=decent
8.5/10
good work homie keep it up
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i liked it...Good Wordplay, good structure...Your Vocab in here was far better than a lot of people doing Om's and its good to see you took time to write this piece instead of just throwing sumthing together like other people do. It was also good of how visual u made it, giving the reader a picture they good see, good job with this piece Kid.
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iight my nigga good looks
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this was an descent piece ,flow was on point
wordplay and vocab was good,,it was more
like a poem instead of a rap,,i wish i could
see more actuall RAps coming from rb but
this was a nice poem type verse
can you return the favor and drop some feed
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292132
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my bed wrong link
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292163
there my link i'm tired of giving
feed and not getting any
