I'm Supposed To Be A King

I'm a hopeless romantic, in the sport like i'm rusty
She wanted tall, dark, and hansom, but i'm short, light, and ugly
Plus my lips are crusty, trust me, i'm so half-baked
There's plenty of fish in the sea, but i don't have bait
I lack faith when i'm stubborn, my pride is a foolish move
If I was color blind, you'd buy me a rubix cube
Cause you hate when i'm complete, these dumb streets spin
I'm like a gun without ammo, depressed for a good reason
Damn yo, a crest fallen, the rest callen for the grand show
There's a difference between being touched or felt
Like The Sopranos, i'll buy you a dildo and sandles
Cause if you don't like the sandles you can go fuck yourself
We fiend for the green, we want more, more, and more
But thou shall not open the door for a whore
See it ain't about party songs so these hoes can strip
That's why i put my foot up they asses, To prove Soul's the shit
Would I be layed out on the strip, killed for my pride
If my parents weren't strict, would I still be alive?
See I rap so much, The vets say the boys is ill
This goal fits my nasty flow, i'm like an oil spill
Will I live the fast life, a nice dude with a whip
Sayen today was a good day, I got Ice Cubes on my wrist?
At this rate, who knows if i'll rock the stage
I Blinked 182 times and forgot my age
Nobody respects me, They only pity who's swirlen
This kid's in the pen for stabben his girlfriend
No question, an alcoholic who shouts and frolics
You're browsen all this, but you can't teach Moe lessons
I left bare footprints when I stepped in mud
I realized you can't even trust your own flesh and blood
That's why adults are cautious and kids are naive
So I gotta ditch my pockets to put the tricks up my sleeve
I'm like the dolphin that decided to chase the shark
I'm impervious to love's pain; You can't break my heart
Don't involve me in any bitch problems you got
But it's a different story if you get robbed on the spot
And these sluts need to plod when the hill's heavy
Cause they mans beat and bruise them, but they still steady
That shit confuses me, Does gettin' black eyes turn you on?
Do you enjoy being a toy when this boy burns your arm?


Girls better respect me, fuck fear, isn't it stupid?
I'm not Humphrey Bogart, but here's lookin at you, kid
Niggas better respect me, fuck fear, it's the worst, right?
I'm not Jackie Chan, but i'll make the first strike
And if I get a daughter, They better respect her
Cause if I die while she's a baby, I may never protect her
And if I get a son, They better respect him
Cause if I die while he's a baby, I may never protect him

For everytime I was rejected, A ghost with broken wings
Would whisper in my ear: "You're supposed to be a king"
My crown's invisible, but i'll toast to see it spring
I'll travel coast to coast so I can bring
The Hip-Hop knowledge and most of it will sting
I can't be stopped, Not even by the host that hears me sing
For every time I was hated, A ghost hopelessly would ring
Into my ears explaining how i'm supposed to be a king

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...77#post4431577

There's plenty of fish in the sea, but i don't have bait

that was pretty nice

That's why i put my foot up they asses, To prove Soul's the shit

and that's the truth, lol

this piece was chock full of imagery and dope flow, ill piece IMO, the mechanics were really nice, good flow, and the inners and rhyme scheme were reeeeeeeeaaaally good.. the wordplay was pretty dope, the line i quoted above was cool, and the overal topic was good. thats what gets most writers nowadays, unoriginal shit, swhy its hard for me to write... naymeanz? well anyway the final stanza had a pretty good refrain/hook type shit goin, liked the ghost as the conscience speaking to him/you.. the second to last stanza had a pretty cool hook touch as well, ive seen both movies...

wait

i just realized this piece was chock full of allusions, which is good and original, dope job with that

ill nominate this for OMHOF once born putsit up like he said he would

hit up "Technicolor Angel"

thanx... (my piece'll be up in 2 minutes)

Aight no doubt, thanks bro.

this drop was nice man. really great!. i liked how you dropped the emotion and multies and blended it VERY WELL together homes. i was realliy into this drop and really feeling it!.
it was a great opener and killer closer. it was word'd and executed to perfection and with excellence as an asset man!.
nice drop!
keep it UP!

more feed please.

storywise this was a very good OM, i liked the language and the multiple rhymes which added complexity to the overall language structure of this om. Imagery was good also, emotion was there and emotion is a fundemtal part of topicals so well done on that. Lastly, i would like to say that this was a very good effort at creating a specific atmosphere, keep it up.

Commetns on the OM below, will be much preciated
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=291425

Like wow..nice drop homie.....nice topic and overall the rhymes and multies were sick
flow was nice and smooth...good job on that...vocab and complexity was def. here..also good job on that....this was a nice and enjoyable read...nice imagery..keep it up

nice flow and nice punches

Word thanks.

I dont know, I'm kind of back and forth with this. Sometimes it was very Slug-ish (Atmosphere) in the sense of usaing battle type wordplay to describe your issues with women and such... And I loved that. But then you would take it to far and the lines would get to casual to the point they were sloppy and couldnt be taken seriously. I think if you found more of a balance this piece would have been amazing. Like the guy above quoted, that "Fish in the sea/no bait" line, I really liked the stuff like that... But then you'd go off with like "crusty lips" and shit like that and it ruind the mood of the story and jsut killed the read. So, not a bad piece, I enjoyed alot of it, I'd just like to see something more consistant from you.

I'd apreciate it if you could reply to the Abstanti collab:
"Poemicoriginate"
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=291509

Up again.