chuuurch.

may i.

pray wen im not religous, just to play wit the interest
slayed for the slaves that gave there savior riches
im layin wit scriptures..holdin holy act one ..wonderin
if i'll get the big picture or if im the only one that does
when will my sign arrive, it better get shipped quick
will i die alive or will that depend on whether i missed it
but if im dead now, i hope heavens got me
aint tryna be the best out, just dope to everybody
forever cocky, i appoligize i gotta be that way
but i gotta die and ur the reason i gotta see that day
were all a thinkin contradiction, im just shiftin from reverends
i shouldnt say im not religious but wanna make it to heaven
fact is, i believe in something n i put the hope in my kids
but all i see is nothin so i dont exactlly know what it is
its a show and a biz, thats all church has amounted too
its work ..n god has the hardest job, so sorry i doubted you
i still refuse to join anyone, in some i see some light
but theres a million religions and only one is right
send light to the halls, enlighten writing to his songs
some dedicate there whole life to something that is wrong
id rather be on the outside wit some doubt to mine
then place faith in somethin and get hung out to dry
i say, if im walkin ..its to my wealth
so i hope when i pray ..

im not just talkin to myself.




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deeep shit man......deep shit...i like ya job

Decent, i think the thought and flow was definitly in deep emotion. no imagery to me, i think you could work on that, multis were really nice though, especially the first bar, that got me hooked. vocab was straight, i think you could expand your thoughts and try something different and more vivid in my eyes... good job tho bro, just more for your knowledge.

link is in my sig.

tight mets. makes you think about things... i like that in topicals. whole verse was pretty powerful, but i was really feeling your ending couplets. that hung out to dry was cool, cause its almost true in a sense. some of it seems a little contridicting though, maybe im just interpreting parts wrong, but it seemed like you were saying god has the hardest job out of everyone, and also saying what if he doesnt exsist. i guess thats not really contridicting, just mixed thoughts. [rambling] cool read though bro. pz.

this was a very nice peice,you had a lot of fantastic multies, and your vocab was quite good as well,you expressed your views very well in this peice, your structure was fine,and the flow that was in this peice was brilliant.This peice actually makes the reader think,which is what I like in an OM, you had nice emotion as well.nice peice keep dropping.

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please return the favour.

its actually supposed to be contradicting, lol. its really how i feel about things ..so its not a piece i thought out. i never believed in god or whatever ..then my boy got shot and killed. and i was like praying that he would be in a better place. then i was confused because, if i dont believe in anything where do i want him to go ..lol. so this is kinda based off that. i know i believe in something but i dont have faith in anything. its supposed come off confused.

good feed guys, appreciate it. i'll hit the links ina few.

yo mets their big on posting 2 links with your pieces here or else they close ya shit mad quick, so yea you should edit 2 links in ya first post before a mod sees this. they mad gay about rules here.

I already fed this on pr

good shit man.

good looking

^^^^^^^^^^^^

holller