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Torn
I'm torn between two worlds of what's right and wrong
I'm either a good girl or a hoe showing her thong
Respect is given when respect is shown
Maybe if i show a little skin guys will leave me alone
I've given up all i had to be accepted for who i am
but through their eyes i'm a whore stealing everyones man
I'm a sophisticate, but people only know what they see
I wear sexy clothes, but i wear what comforts me
Twas a smart young lady doing beautiful things
got involved with the wrong person who showed a side of me i never seen
I ended up living my whole life the despicable street way
did what i could to get money so at night somewhere my head could lay
I guess everyone was right when they said i wouldnt be something
To this day i can honestly say that i am nothing
When i look into my sisters eyes all i see is shame
nothing but tears rollong down whenever she hears my name
"Tora....baby girl don't be mad at me
all i ever wanted was for you to be proud of me
I'm sorry if i caused so much pain by what i do
I honestly wish i could say those dreadful ways are through
Yet still im torn because i dont want to live this way
but i found out behind every bad moment shines a new day"
Torn,Torn....torn is what i am
wish i could get myself out of this jam
Torn,Torn....what am i supposed to do
a powerful voice told me "only the power in you can save you"
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here are links to other om's i left feedback on
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?p=4391871#post4391871
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=289672
for some reason i cant get into these links but one of them is "jesus understands" by Keyedand the other is " A letter from heaven" by Im signed HeHe
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aight.i would really appreciate some feedback on this.thank you
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Yea This Was Pretty Dope Tori Fa Sho..Frav Lines..
I guess everyone was right when they said i wouldnt be something
To this day i can honestly say that i am nothing
When i look into my sisters eyes all i see is shame
nothing but tears rollong down whenever she hears my name
"Tora....baby girl don't be mad at me
all i ever wanted was for you to be proud of me
I'm sorry if i caused so much pain by what i do
I honestly wish i could say those dreadful ways are through
Real Emotional Shit, Vocab And Flow Were On Point Although Some Meta's And Multis Could Of Made This A Real Winner, I Only Wish Youd Have Made It A Lil Longer, Also I Wouldnt Bold Ya Lyrics, It Makes It Look Unatractive...
But Still This Was Pretty Dope,..Good Job.
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thanx for the feed,and thanx for lettin me kno bout the bold letterings,i think imma change it.
uppin for more feed
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yo tori I c where u got u're ammo for this one since I know alil of u're history behind this piece it was real good it was totally all u no slight amount of fakeness or uncertaintity (even though a few things did seem like they didn't happen to u but u managed ta sell it anyway) tha structure and flow were hard to get at first but near tha middle I picked it up and tha words were smooth also imagery and emotion were real strong I find this a must read and not juss cuz we tite but its that good
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yea,i had some sort of story to tell.it came from me because of wats goin on in my life and there are alot of stuff i would love to apologize to my sister about my life.but yea u kno the story,but thanx for the feed.
uppin for more please n thank u
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ooh this was good kinda sad but good it made me feel like a punk all soft in side man you killed this it sounds to real to be not true and the flow was on point you did every thing perfect in this one
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uppin for more feedback thanx
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yea that was pretty nice tori well since u mentioned my name i guess i'm a star-a
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This wasnt bad. You definately got your message across & i felt the emotion. The only thing is that it was a little simple. There were no multi's, no metaphors, no internal rhyming. Not that every piece HAS to have it.. it just would have made this that much better. Keep going though.. you have potential.
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aight thanx.uppin for more feed
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