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Topic: "Fear"
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due monday at midnight
20-30 lines
400 to vote
all votes fully explained
Topic: "Fear"
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good luck.
bra.. the other one that i made does not have a poll so check in on this one this has the poll right here okay
okay then good luck........ dammmm you caught on quicker than i thought you would but okay its goin down see ya.
Tae tryin hit. oh, and goodluck.
cmon guys drop soon.... dont fail us dusk... and lmfao you guys got verbal skills D/Ring you lmfao he jus voted on my battle
imma drop monday for sho.... i would drop tonight but i already know hes gona drop monday so ima wait til then on the same day so its all together
oh aight then, thats all good, GL guys..
Fear
By: Dusk2Dawn
*Cough, Cough*
*Blinks and winces a few times, then looks around*
*Realizes he’s tied to a chair, struggles to get out*
*Starts to break down, while sobbing intensely, starts to gag*
(What happens next may be hard for some people to read)
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My stomach turns; I’ve never been in a position like this before
Hearing wild screams, half eaten bodies torn apart by carnivores
Hardcore gore galore, wish my eyes stayed shut and never woke up
Fear’s setting in, seeing gruesome views of bodies torn up by paper cuts
Blood pored in cups, looking around the room only makes me intense
My panic becomes intense noticing bodies hooked to a wired fence
No self defense; an incense carries through the room and on through the home
Fear really starts to kick in as I start to get dizzy, realizing my death will be alone
My body’s prone, not in my right state of mind, trying to think happy thoughts
I’m left puzzled; no answer to be found leaves my emotions extremely distraught
This battle can’t be fought; my eyes open to a light seeping through a door
A body falls down the steps to the floor followed by a man I’ve never seen before
He stares at me as I try to ignore, realizes I’m alive, comes over and sits down
With a smirk on his face punches me and literally makes my face spin around
His face turns to a frown as he looks deep into my eyes acknowledging my fear
He disappears but is back in an instance with tools of one of an engineer
(My body has gone numb from the torture being done.
I know longer feel pain, now I start to way in on fear.)
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Damn, is he ever going to stop drilling, there can’t be organs still in tack
This is a certain death, but was this planned?... or just a random attack?
This is more torture than anyone can imagine, fear’s still inside me
I know what’s going to happen to me and what’s more scary than dying
Whoever said there afraid of spiders never been looking at death face to face
I’m not religious but I really hope theirs a heaven and God really does embrace
But I can’t expect to go to this place when I’ve never had any faith
Eternal darkness is almost as scary as knowing from this I can’t escape
The hole in my chest starts to gape as I notice a tub of water
This sick fuck can’t just kill me he wants a full fuckin slaughter
Fuck I want to cry but my body is so decomposed tears can’t come out
I know my mind is deteriorating because all of a sudden I picture clouds
I’ve finally figured it out, *plunge* my head goes into this tub
Then he pulls me out and beats me over the head with a club
I’m done as he says my time’s up, I finally take my least breath
And finally realize I don’t fear dying I fear what's next after death
alright imma drop now i just woke up its around 12 so im not too late..... let me drop real quick..... and get this shit out the way
tyme 2 wake up and drop dat topical.....gurls lookin nice in da pic huh lol *gets sleep out of her eyes* LMAOROFL
G/L dis 2 both.....
My fear: Fear frm the struggle
- Kiki
Dear Diary,
imagine arising one mornin and cant take a simple breath
imagine arising one morning facing the peak of your death
delusions filling my mind cant separate the truth from the fake
seeing my Mother's body float above my head the sight i cant take
Voices calling my namechasing me around my on my own home
see the blood drip down the walla everytime im facing home alone
wanna force the demons out my thoughts steady on my medication
wanna die from this earth but to my 3kids i have a life-long dedication
dead corpses dance around my bed im screamin without any tears
No one can hear my cries because my body traps my inside my fears
Holding my bible wont help me force away the trials & tribulations
beating my head in the wall i'm tired of the fearful hallucinations
See my lonely self in the mirror each day No life work I proceed
Suddenly my skin turned blue as my mouth opened and began to bleed
fear continues to follow my footsteps..........
try not to keep in contactw ith eyes everyone's eyesight I avoid
wanna surrender myself to the Lord cant Go a day not being paranoid
As i sit in the bath water blood feels from the bottom to top
Invisible hands grip my throat blood rushing then my head went"pop!"
want the animosity 2 stop for happiness what can i surrnder?
tired of actign normal when i'm afraid tired of bein this pretender
My ill-ness is rare and not usual but the visions in my life are exclusive
wasn't fearful of anything when younger now my life is abusive
my mind tortured in terror and fear will soon bury my soul
my life goal is gone from the perfect future the Flames stole
Devil meets me at the foot of my bed and then He surprisingly said:
"Its time to spend Eternity in My flames" His soul entered my head....
this is my usual week my thoughts I cant defend...
fear takes over myself at the beginnin then til the end...
uppin #1 4 this battle letz get thiz shit closed............................................ .........
Damn this was some thought out hardcore shit right here from both of you
Dusk-I really liked your wordlplay..and your structure better..and plus you kinda told a story of what was happening while you were in fear..it was real nice..everything about it was 9/10
Ladie-I loved how you kinda went from seeing the fear to feeling the fear..it was good and thought out..i could read yours fine but the structure wasnt as good as dusks..he just had better vocabulary and i liked the fact he spit a story along with it..good shit tho 8/10
If i could vote..it goes to dusk for better structure and better use of vocabulary
i vote dusk took this battle he had structure, metaphorical usage, good imagery, and consistency, i like some of ya lines in this, it was good flowed proper, ladie i feel you have the ability to drop bettere than what you did, i think just given alittle more time you could be really dope, just keep at it, get more onclusive and add some better imagery to your pieces, anyway good shit yall keep it up, pz