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The Wraith
aight ya'll i was watchin this move called the wraith an it inspired me to make this song. i've recorded it an it sounds pretty good. so if you would check this out an let me know what you think.
hook
i'm the wraith, yeah somethin like Charlie Sheen
lyrically rape, you an every member in ya team
gone get scraped, off the road for fuckin wit me
cause i'm the wraith, forget it you can't compete wit me
verse 1
some say that i kill, but i call it revenge
i just keep it real, ain't no need to pretend
ghostly figures visit me, at night in my dreams
it tells me spit it b, an ya rivals will scream
they gonna regrett, every thang they did
demandin respect, cause it go to the kid
this ain't no hospital, i ain't got the patience
lyrics get skribbled, cause time is just wastin
God don't promise it, lyircs so damn dominant
they ain't no stoppin it, cause i keep hip-hoppin em
you drink hydraulic fluid, just to get high
you hard bitch prove it, i'll be here all night
you an ya crew, like skank an gutter boy
listen to me dude, don't st..st..stutter boy
ya lyrics just reek, thinkin you hard but you weak
but i got my whole fleet, knock ya ass to next week
jump on you, like a rat on a cheeto
lyrically kill you, like eminem did benzino
lyrical bullshit, thats what you spit
lyrical cool shit, thats what my fans get
i'm comin for you bitch, watch ya fuckin back
ya wig gettin split, by my baseball bat
an that's a fact, bitch you just wack
hook
i'm the wraith, yeah somethin like Charlie Sheen
lyrically rape, you an every member in ya team
gone get scraped, off the road for fuckin wit me
cause i'm the wraith, forget it you can't compete wit me
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I think it started out strong and got slightly more timid as I read on. Like you almost started talking shit to someone who wasn't there.....You had a nice concept from your inspiration source, but you kinda drifted off on metaphorical nonsense in the end. All in all I liked it for the fact that it flowed with a simple nursery rhyme rythem. You had some nice vocab in there and some dope lines....Oh yea...LmaO @ Rat on a cheeto. ! !
Good shit hOmiE
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dope song /......................nice nice nic eflo.......i was liking it...............the last 2-4 lines of yo verse killed it though......you gotta give the hardest line there..lik they wont forget hearing that line cause its so deep and skillful, it summarizes the whole song.........in 2-4 line....................or if ya got the talent...which you may..................1 line./............overall very good peice...................p-e-a-c-e.no-hate.................
