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One day at a time
a quick verse out of frustration
Everyday i wake up with no ambition to move
hittin the snooze, everythings fucked n im pissin the blues
know i got reason but i got this mission confused,wishin for clues
see lifes a bitch and sober i cant face her
need a pick me up, 151 and no chaser
look at other people lifes, why i gotta live mine this way
i aint lyin in the lines i say, i got court dates and fines to pay
this shits takin over my life with a vengence
i need a job and i jus got my liscense suspended
depressed? on average im sayin fuck twice in a sentence
this stress is buildin up n i cant fight it alone
its like a knife in my bone plus im fightin at home
success is slippin outta my reach
fuck rappin i jus wanna shout on some beats
cuz im this close to bein kicked out on the streets
college? cop trouble is gunna fuck up my chance for a loan
needa talk to someone n my girl wont answer the phone
they say todays a gift, yesterdays history n tomorrows a mistery
a gift? yea thanks alot for givin me misery
all these thoughts do is stay in my mind
they're gettin theirs n im waitin for mine, take it one day at a time
if u want me to return feed jus drop a link
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This was a coo little joint, Short but still good. Rhyme scheme here was kinda nice. Flow was on point through out most of it. Can you see you had some emotions poured into this, but lacked a little creativity. Just work on that and you'll be fine and if you had alot of frustration you shoulda took the time to write a little bit more nah mean? To spill all your feelings. Heres some of the lines I liked:
Everyday i wake up with no ambition to move
hittin the snooze, everythings fucked n im pissin the blues
know i got reason but i got this mission confused,wishin for clues
Overall not bad little drop, Hope to see some longer drops from you in the future. Keep elevating. Peace Easy!
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thanks for the feed, uppin for some more
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