Off The Mind

This Is Real Tense
Shots To The Head For Talking Shit Make Sense
Because Don't Talk Shit To A Man Who Have Issues
Thats Why He's Killing You But God Will Bless You
Sometimes a Threat From A Thug Is Just To Test You
Got Other Crews But Nobody's With You
The Streets Are Dark Nigga You Just Got Shot You Can't Walk
Because You Had To Talk Shit And for That You Got Spark
See My Ryhmes Better Tangy And So Sweet
My Ryhmes May Taste Like Tea But Don't Fuck With Me
Im The Best Ever Since Rakim Was Gone
Still Rocafella Won't Get Me With Shawn
You Know Jay-Z Right Shawn Carter Executive Producer
Just Blaze Production I Just Had To Take It Over

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nice, i like the flow and everything, all right rhymes, u could work on it... but i guess i like it.... leave some feedback on mine-

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hmmm...

Ok, this wasn't really that great...In OM, you don't really need to promote yourself...But, I'll get to the verse's content now...

It had a decent flow, but it times it seemed sort of chopped...You had a few decent metaphors but nothing amazing...You're vocabulary could stand a lot of work; it was very simplistic...It just seems to get boring when all you see is 1-syllable words...that's just my opinion, though...It rhyme well, I'll give you that...It was somewhat of a boring read, though..I see potential, but you're going to have to practice a lot...