Drift.

ive created something to live for...

i have created something to breath for

im fucked up....

i lost consouiscness or what i thought was bliss
every remedy taken fom merories each kiss
the lich rose fromt he dead to hiss away the glory
each story walked into the wrong territory
a stich on my arm where i fell on rocks
or was i just falling knocking the learning blocks



wont deny that
seen too many blood tears drop
a remedy turned to slop
tendincies turn to hate
a simple fate for all humanity
vanity of our backyards grows
as the new snow fall descends
i rend er each boardwalk alone
as i roam a barren landscape
litterd by metals of old
i was told...
if you dont know who to thank
youd wish it was blank
a fishtank world
glass surroounds us ready to break
so we take another breath and wait
the debate to settles
i cant seem to mettle again
frame the same thing each day has been
i would pay omish but gods asking for souls
the death tole another sheep faughter for the slaughter

I remedy in theses tendincies to love
each rhytmic bending see, realeses a grey dove

links on the way.

Not a good representation of your true talent...
...however i see it as a attempt towards showing ur capable of new styles

The piece was short to the point, nothiing was like WOW!, it had a nice flow to it with an odd rhymescheme, which made it much more poetic 2 me. It was basic in some sense, yet showd some sign of thought with some of the content, definetly not a piece that was ment to be sought out 4 HOF.. it was just a piece that was ment to be takin as a point, and i thought you did a pretty good job of venting out a piece..that u seemd necessary to drop! also as though it was short, you put in some nice wordplay,internals that spiced it up throughout the piece...regardless it was pretty good..not amazing..but ok


keep ups man....