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Cheating Bitch
I fell like I've just walked in on the set of a Roger Corman movie
Full of bad dialogue, tacky sets, 99 pound weaklings, naughty nymphettes
Coffe rings on everything, can't see where my halo's been
Caviar to the General, cold coffe for the queen
GET OUT OF MY HOUSE GET OUT OF MY HOUSE GET OUT
If a hermit lives in ecstasy, his lack of comfort has become luxury
I tried to cook up some privacy but the doorbell tore up the recipe
At the end of my tether, they're hell for leather, everybody talks about the weather
I was standing I was standing on the landing now I'M standing in the hall
GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT!!!!!
Caviar cold coffee the milk's gone off. Like a coctail, molotov
Caviar cold coffee the grapes of wrath. Cocktail with your molotov?
I'm not complacent in my basement. Who's the judge? Here comes the jury...
Get that blunt object out of my face, there's too much violence in front of T.V.
Be a bit more un-can-ny...my temple was a shrine
You don't govern me,you can't turn off milk into wine
Ima get out of this house and leave this women alone
What I did was stupid now I must step down from my throne
GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT!!!!!!!!
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uppin for some feed people
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this was aight, but theys a lot of room for improvement. ya flow seemed a lil rushed an stretched out at times. you had some solid lines but you need more of a ryme scheme if you gonna make ya lines so long. but just keep doin ya thang an you'll have a flawless om. no can you return the favor an leave feed on this one. http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=284187
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^dont ever post in my threads again
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I fell like I've just walked in on the set of a Roger Corman movie
Full of bad dialogue, tacky sets, 99 pound weaklings, naughty nymphettes
Coffe rings on everything, can't see where my halo's been
Caviar to the General, cold coffe for the queen
GET OUT OF MY HOUSE GET OUT OF MY HOUSE GET OUT
If a hermit lives in ecstasy, his lack of comfort has become luxury
I tried to cook up some privacy but the doorbell tore up the recipe
At the end of my tether, they're hell for leather, everybody talks about the weather
I was standing I was standing on the landing now I'M standing in the hall
GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT!!!!!
Caviar cold coffee the milk's gone off. Like a coctail, molotov
Caviar cold coffee the grapes of wrath. Cocktail with your molotov?
I'm not complacent in my basement. Who's the judge? Here comes the jury...
Get that blunt object out of my face, there's too much violence in front of T.V.
Be a bit more un-can-ny...my temple was a shrine
You don't govern me,you can't turn off milk into wine
Ima get out of this house and leave this women alone
What I did was stupid now I must step down from my throne
GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT OF MY HOUSE,GET OUT!!!!!!!!
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i read this yesterday...was 2 layzi 2 leave feed..lol but i came again & read it.. i hadn't expected it how it turned out as i read it.. which is what i like about this..
very original.. it was interestin 2 read & the wordin was great.. imagery was very vivid..i liked three of the verses..niice meta's in this..u are a good writer no doubt.. i don't think i've ever read anything from u.. but chea i'll deffo watch out for ya stuff.. good looks..1lurv..
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This Was Alright....
Flow Was On An Off. Vocab Was Good An So Was Wordplay. There Were A Few Multi's I Liked. I Didn't Really Like The Topic Just Because Your Verse Didnt Explain Why She Cheated Or Such An Such.
...Keep Up Everything Else.
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pretty interesting man...topic caught my eye, i would have left feed earlier but way too lazy to..anywyaz..yea this was aight peice....coulda been a bit better..flow was a bit off in places but in sum it was good, so basically it was on and off effected the way i read it..ya rhymes were good in places but aight in sum......vocab was aight not really here same with complexity and imagery was descent.......overall i think you coulda dont a better job cuz the other OMs ive seen from you were much better than this...peace~
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haha i liekd this shit it wasnt much to read but what you dropped was hot tho i was feelin each line and each bar yamean im a drama person so i enjoy shyt like that and i liekd this you expressed soem strong feelings about a certain chick that fucked up tahts hot doe teh flow was tight and ya vocab wanst bad either
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Tanx sis and Plain Thug I dont think you got what I was talking about.This is more poetic I just posted it in the wrong place LOL
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I'm really feelin this man. It brought me into it. like the use of words in it.
If a hermit lives in ecstasy, his lack of comfort has become luxury
I tried to cook up some privacy but the doorbell tore up the recipe
that was my favorite. you really have talent. I like the way you closed it also. good work. keep it up man.
