Thoughts before a Murder.

Thoughts Before A Murder

Fatal thoughts trapped in a maze, inner thoughts speak softly
Glocks is all i see, judges saying murder in all degrees
Never killed anybody flesh and bones broken, killing is fun
Hear the past cries and mutters, people's head being pointed by a gun
The clock is ticking, anger begins to rise, somebodys supossed to die
When i was younger hate was a big thing, but no time for asking why
Face mask on and all, pressure begins to become intense
Building suspense, atacking people with no type of defense
Phone rings on and off, "Yo are you ready yet?"
No time to sweat, but I would be the #1 suspect
Never was I humbled, Risen through the mountains...then tumbled
"If you cant do the time, don't do the crime", but I would run though
Thoughts on my mind can't explain them, thousands of bleeps
And me lacking in my mind, should I kill this guy alive or in his sleep?
It felt as if my bones and lungs were seperated at birth, I was special
And nothing ever bloomed in my mind, i was hot...with no kettle
Getting high was an occasion, made me feel good, and on top
But until that day.... I was stopped by an traffic cop
These thoughts are readical, a change reaction im pumping nothing..
My life was always a downswing, you can just catch me on my moodring...
Killing this lady, I take everything i did in my life, lesson learned well
And now that I'm dead, I now am burning for eternity in........Hell
Looking back before the murder, I had never stopped thinking
It was almost like a chain reaction, thoughts blooming like it was spring
Mind was given to people for a reason, so use it and never stop
And telling everyone you'r on top.....You might just end up getting shot!
Taking someones life away, oh the sorrow and agony i must live with
And if i could renew my life again, I shall call this a stupid Myth
So now im gone & done with, live your life well, no concerns for the earners
And looking back at this.........These were my Thoughts Before A Murder

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hey mayne i like the topic.....you really got my caught in the whole thing, nice OM here....i was feeling ur view and u had good flow and wordplay.......8.5/10

Nice feed :rolleyes: upp.

Nice jod orginal concept and a great drop Fam
I felt ya imagenary waz strong and ya emtion waz just a strong flow waz hot and the layout waz nice in the but u should of streched the vocab more tho but nice drop

had sum good creativity in this piece.. i felt a lot of it could of been worded a bit better though fosho..
and some lines were a little oner cliched i reckon.. but i guess they worked still in asense.. flow was good for the most part in my view..
had a few multies here and there.. but cudda maybe had more..or more internal rhyming might titen the flow .............

vocab was ok..cudda maybe been a bit sharper in places
decent ending still

good drop

pz1

Thanks for the feed dukes.

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Damn! good shit linex, i was really feeling this piece, you had good imagery, and caught my eye from the beginning, prolly cuz i like crazy shit like this, you had good flow homie, and real nice imagery from my point of view, i felt you wer great on the topic, and as well as being consistent throughout your whole piece, like your choice of vocabluary, you had my attention holmes. good structure, and agian good topic holmes, waiting to see more, lol, keep dropping holmes, nice shit all around~1

Yeah this was very good.Nicley displayed and had some brilliant creativity.Structure worked and imagery was good.I did not get bored as I am with a lot of pieces these days.This is something decent and that is actually very good.It is my first time reading your shit and believe me i'll be looking out for it a lot more.Nice work

pz..

Woah, thanks guys.

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