My Heart Is Like Steel

My heart is like steel, it is quite difficult to be broken
I'm capable of standing harsh situations............
And i fought through a funeral when the priest had spoken
The love of my life had left me for a reason.......
In my mind i can hear her voice over my heavy breathing
Thinkin about the hurtful things that happened....
Now I'm takin out my sadness by skillfully rappin..
Cuz my heart is like steel...I got to keep it real.......
No body shows pity on me when i'm on the ground hurt
Blood leaking out of my veins, soaking up my shirt
I just try to make life more easy, But this is the outcome
inocently walking sum one shot me, where'd the bullet comefrom?
No one knows, not even the crime investigators, Oh no!
I might go loco..but suddenly resist and go back to original
I keep my anger at the minimal, try not to turn into a criminal
The only reason why i'm not is becuz my heart is like steel
Hard to take over or break,no one knows how the fuck i feel
oh, for goodness sake, God be with me, I feel depressed....
I'm not crazy, I'm not possessed,I'm just evily blessed.....
Heart made of steel so it my ego,I stand for justice........
Like the symbol on the top of the flag, I'm like an eagle...
People think they understand me, but they dont....
and they wont, hear me out clearly, obviously......
People think i have emotional problems, but it dont bother me
I'm used to it...I just fight back cuz my heart is like steel ...
So it my spirit...and people keep askin me "how can you bear it?"
I have a strong heart and it aint gettin any weaker....
My heart is like steel, why not announce it on the loud speaker??

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uppin for feed^^

to be honest i wasnt really feelin this that much

the flow was ok but a lil forced in areas. Your vocab was meh the entire piece was pretty simplistic. You had a few internal rhymes but you it seems liek you dont know how to use them right cuz those seem to be the time when your flow seemed forced. Imagry wasnt really there and there wasnt very much emotion. You take on the topic was very simplistic and i would have liked to see more from you here

Just keep writing and getting better

ok..thanks for the honest feed homie :)

c'mon...uppin 4 feed

ight drop....

startin off wit the little things....Structure was good and flow was good but it some places seemed forced a little bit....imagery was so so i think u could have put a little bit more into to go along wit the emotion said of the peice...i thought your vocab was good being simplistic at times but still was good....favorite lines i like in this was

oh, for goodness sake, God be with me, I feel depressed....
I'm not crazy, I'm not possessed,I'm just evily blessed.....

also

I might go loco..but suddenly resist and go back to original
I keep my anger at the minimal, try not to turn into a criminal

emotion was felt in both of them lines...good job peace

wow...this was really great..
u used Flawless vocab..
i piece flowed to a extreme perfection..
great sense of Imagry...great sense of the feelins or going thru
not only r u a great Battle Rapper ur also a great Topical Head
a Perfect 10/10 real good my nigga...real good

thanks..i appreciate the feed....i'll hit up your oms when i get a chance

Yo man change the font or something cuz the Structre was kinda off. Thw wordplay was nice and flow was right there. As far as Sroty. This is a 9/5-10 OM.
Keep It Up.

Ok i'ts like this..
You deffinately have potential man but now you'r like average and boring. I don't mean that in a hate way but this piece was odd and simple. It's like you could really predict what words were coming next and what rhymes were coming up, pieces like that don't make the storyline very interesting, nah mean? Also, like every minute your flow was like getting fucked up, so work on your flow a lil. You should aslo try using some big words to make it interesting, structure was fine even though you dont need great structure to make a piece dope.

I have a strong heart and it aint gettin any weaker....
My heart is like steel, why not announce it on the loud speaker??

^^Those 2 lines right there i didn't get, lol. What do you mean by that?

Anyways fix up stuff like that that doesn't make sense. Happy elevation. Pz

-Linex

aight..yea i no what ya mean...i've done better in the past

my other 2 om linkz in my sig are pretty tight..u can check them out too

thanks for the feed both of ya..i appreicate it....