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A Harsh History
A Harsh History..........
Memories of the past and broken hearts leading to a trial of tears
the passion of life and the secrets,that have been held for years
somewhat a regret for what has happened in the violent history
mistreatings,beatings,the reasons remains an unsolved mystery
life scars and soul mates,heart was just a large bruise,being abused
anytime,the harrasment has never been excused,often when refused
sudden relief of stress when escaped from these tragic events
it was a living nightmare the haunted horror from past tense
heart brake during the harsh history of burried incidents
created from a sinner but still living to barely sentence it
in the words not being able to describe except,a living hell
the nice life and excitement...a fraud she wasn't living well
giving birth every nine months father never seen the child
a distance not knowing the feet and yards,between these miles
Learning a different language like reading a whole grammar guide
....the life is just as bizzare as pistol fights against a samurai
but things have changed,now living the life of a celeberty
weightless cries in the past,but the tears raised heavily
as good as it will ever be,blind innocents that she could never see
The vindictive thoughts will not let the heart get me
because a easy future,symbolizes a harsh history...............
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this is very deep and emotional...............................wow....... ............................
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It's a good drop in my opinion, for the most part it seemed to come from your heart. The rhyming was okay, nothing to write home about. Vocabulary was good also, I'd keep going and practicing to improve your flow since that's what works for me. But overall it was a good and deep rap song.
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thanx for the feedback you guys............
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this was an alright piece. topic wasnt bad and i think your concept was a lil basic but blah.. imagry was ok in this piece as well was the emotion which stood out a lil bit more in this then anything else...flow was pretty much on point throughout the entire piece and your vocabulary was pretty good as well..another kinda short piece here and i think if you take a lil more time and increase your writting the imagry and emotion will be better...this was overall an ok piece so keep writing
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uppin this here.............
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this piece was str8, but i liked the topic , and the wauy you stuk to it. the imagry was clear and understandable to me. the structure was okay, and it had sum deep thoughts in this piece also. i enjoyed the ryme skeme in also with the good vocab. this piece caught my eyes ... keep writing fams....
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word uppin.......................
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nice consistency, liked the flow and structure to it, vocab was cool too, decent piece.
fav lines- somewhat a regret for what has happened in the violent history
mistreatings,beatings,the reasons remains an unsolved mystery
life scars and soul mates,heart was just a large bruise,being abused
anytime,the harrasment has never been excused,often when refused
sudden relief of stress when escaped from these tragic events
it was a living nightmare the haunted horror from past tense
heart brake during the harsh history of burried incidents
created from a sinner but still living to barely sentence it
in the words not being able to describe except,a living hell
the nice life and excitement...a fraud she wasn't living well
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thanks man........uppin this please
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damn kinda fell back uppin......................
