dreams

still in progress at the moment, its quiet a mind bendin sorta drop, u need to see the other 3 verses to understand but i aint finished em yet, still needs a bit of tendin to, but here da 1st drop n e wayz. i think i leave u in suspense.



i keep having these dreams that re-occur when i sleep
what do they mean? i know, let me picture the scene
im staring at a cross-road, in the distance a stream,
and somewhere between theres a hut on a green
i looked left and then right, then straight back ahead
i walked to the hut, met a gal who then said
ill give you 4 tarrot cards for forfillin your quest
u'll know what to do cos its all in ya head
she lay the cards down each producing a symbol
a p.c, a brain, a train and a thimble
keep them safe in your coat, thats all i can tell you
well i can tell you 1 thing, it aint gone be simple
and in a blink of an eye and a puff of grey smoke
she dissapeared, laughin like she'd just heard a joke
so off i then went after i put on ma cloak
thats all i remember cos then i awoke........................



to be continued

i swear there some next shit gwarnin on dis sit, 6 members and 30 odd guests, tings need to be changed, everyone shud be members to view forums, i seen bare stuff bitten off dis site. n e ways c'mon uppin for feed

2 links needed man.. read the rules

dude, is that all u got to say? like i sed up there. some next shit, n some next people

man, this was weak, i wasnt really feelin it at all
center ur piece it will make it look better thats 1
2, make it longer, and pick a better topic
3 leave 2 links
Stay Up ~1~

this was good not great but good
it was short a lil to short
flow was ok
rhymed nice
easy to read

but it jus was off but u can get better

yeah still. i get wha you sayin, keep it in mind for next time. cheers

It was half decent, it was a bit simple though. Post a continuation and make it a bit more complex and longer. It did flow good though and it fit together pretty good.

Post more though

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