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A Tribal Beat
A Tribal Beat
The interface of tribal civilization weaves within a culture
........dependent to life on a spiritual podium
holding them in the hand of their beholder; unable to falter
........what moves contagiously under their skins
brings relief from religious beliefs executed by traditions
........of dance for bodly peace to a beat from within
to beat out sin growing weak to a tribes escstatic ambitions
........transfixed as one;dancing as though possessed
for a prize possession of life & protection from an ill mannerd vibe
........to participate in positive energy to summon
ancestors of painted life flowing noticable throughout a tribe
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God forgivin for the strenght living within these poverty strickin souls
that breath religous beliefs to unfold natures riches; culture consoles
the depths of worn flesh collect time designed to beat a demonic sin
feasting inside as the harmonic beat begins releasing evil from within
as we work to live enduring free time to dance;our enjoyment is pure
they live to work enjoying rituals of dance as an deployment of cure
a tribes music places a trance to the poeple to insure ritual enhancment
proving compassion to the spirts stepping on in ecstatic fashion
concious focusd intenstly flowing immensely showing amends to thee
ghostly presence pretuding the tense dancers who do so dependently
blood drained faces eye the sky as they glide though the sands
music commands unity enhanced by the joining of witherd hands
children stand joining the dance prominading the beaten earth
with awkard movents lasting coninusously until body recieves it worth
sweat falls off breathing skin clensed from within a givers mind
beleiving in administering time with enchanments to shiver the spine
of cobwebs trapping parasites overlapping inner light of wellness
granted by rituals of medicine acted apon to help the helpless
Civilized nations seek these ritual powers and compare
them to our medical advancments.yet cannont put a finger on their....
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Tansfixed cultures alter life through dancing
........indigenous of tribal expressions
prancing over natural scenes for religious beliefs
........constructing an impression
to a beat from within; beating sin freeing the soul
........through musical medicine
or lament ancestory steps of humanly cleanliness
.......a ritual pavement of testament
and famly descent dancing to refresh battered bodies
........commonly weak
to be drivin by a sacred beat energizing harmony
........of blackend feet
facing a trance deep inhancing life fortifying
........a bodies deepest doubt
which weeps of whats left from a depth where tears
........dance from within on out
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made of cultures that range of all ages where infectious disease rages
nations with wages are prescripted........
while these lifted tribes have danced unscripted for ages
they survive of near nothing suffering from what we see on there skins
yet resting on there soul is happyiness.......
cuz we play music with technology; while theirs....comes from within
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i would cut some parts but all in all really enjoyable piece..
vocab and structure is nice.i enjoyed reading it.
overall 8/10
keep up
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This was a very creative peice and had source of complexity and imagery....
Rhymes were good and topic was very interesting....flow was smooth....
structure was even.....this was a great peice man, very enjoyable to read
keep it up homie..you got rap skillz....peace
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yo man this was really good.
I love reading shit that is worth the time.
Flow was there and so was wordplay.
Work on structre and you got it.
Liked tha plot a lot.
8-10
Keep it up.
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LAST UP!
then on to something serious
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This was a nice piece. Your vocab was amazing and I praise you for that. It may seem long with the lines to read but fuck that. You gave great imagery and outstanding flow. I liked how you managed your piece. This is long but worth the read. I love rhymes man. Good job. Just work on makin your lines shorter and improve your structure.
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This piece was very creative, i like the topic as well, it was very understandable to read, also you had a clear structure, it was str8 also. the flow okay, but this piece was kind of deep. i saw good imagry as well. your vocabulary was good, you used your words right. this piece was well writtin. keep droppin good science fams.....
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