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blind revenge
one kid,one knife tied in a moral bind
to quick to grow-up never found a meaning for life
spent years wondering contemplating his lifes death
how could his pain effect so many people,when it's his calm that left
known only as it even this kid's existent was non-existent
his parents used to lock him up when he used resistance
grew up in a broken home his parents used to beat and abuse him
falling onto the pillows crying cuz the lights making his head spin
he lost control he never thought he would lose it
but he started rapping and found his anger could flow thru it
his parents confronted him but the lyrics ..he longed to do he was pulled in
pulled out a gun....gunshots, he ran and never stopped running
his life continually fast paced and dangerous
page long articals...locked up,no this kid still nameless
all he wanted was to cause the pain he had to endure
he hustled ppl pickpocketed and lied for pleasure
he thought he could change things but he was now homeless
now i bet you all can see why is life was so unfocused
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aaw syn this piece is deep.. i'm glad u in my crew mayne.. i'm deffo feelin it..
i wudda leave more feed babe but i'm illlin in heaven wit chu ;) lol
i might come back 2 this later dow..1lurv..
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pretty nice peice..good rhymes....nicely flowed
topic was pretty cool...strucutre was even
vocab and complexity/ imagery was alright
overall this was pretty nice...keep it up...
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nice shit homie real dope peice homie you had nice creativity and it was deep thats all I gotta say man.....good shit
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Well, it was short, jumpy, and sometimes hard to grasp the subject. Though it had beginers mistakes, I thought it was a pretty nice drop, just next time, make it a little longer that way you can have the story flowing, instead of jumping all over the place.
Pretty deep topic, elevate.
Keep dropin and you will.
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hmm flowed well throughout it all.. topic was good babe.. tha imagery in this
was good 2.. i enjoyed readin this syn good looks.. tha vocab was aiite 2.. keep
doin ya thang b..1lurv
