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The City Of Angels
I Come from the city of angels
Where if you wear blu in the wrong hood nigga's will kill you
its hard coming up in the city god, where young black males cant get a job
where all the rappers come to live and eat ur food
they claim there from here but they really dont kno nothin about our hood
this is where Tookie Williams was born and killed
nigga's will run up on you and thats for real
so you think juss bcuz u new nigga's wont try to kill you?
then u a funny fool,try acting hard and cool in my hood
i gurantee you wont walk and talk outta here so good
gang bangers and drug slangers as young as 13
if u make it to 21 get on ur knees and praise the lord all mighty supreme
and u betta get out and stop selling that "ice cream"
every night gun shots go off, rapisct on the loose u her lil girls scream
but i hold my block down with my nine and a infared beam
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I'm feeling the structure you set up alot. You had a nice rhyme scheme going and you stayed on topic. My only knock is that you come with some punches and more creative lines.
