16 Bars

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This was ok, i didn't feel it much as the topics a lil played, but i can see ya tried, next time make the strucutre a lil better, as making the line lengths more even.....overall it's aight, Keep it Poppin'

Also, this is a lil freestyle by me:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=3991859

A yo when i spit its sorta like me shootin a mack
when i get started niggaz dont got no time to react

cause im a real gunna i aint afraid ta blast the mack
dont call me trigga happy jus say i got a fast react

your usen tha same shit over, come on man. There are no punch lines or nothin this looks like sumthin i wrote when i was 12. Its senseless

Gost Writer for all you know i might just be 12 but thanks for the feed anyway

that wasent 16 bars

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yeah it was ok.....................but u still need 2 elevate..................pz.