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Dangerous
Im the wolf in the woods, dont wanna mess with me
im the cat in the alley, the shadow that you cant see
slipping behind the enemy lines, like a stealth bomber
but dropping rhymes
Or maybe, im dropping bombs on the mic
blowing your shit apart, thats what i like
to do, when im standing here facing you
before long you'll be laid out in bed, like you got the flu
Your up to your neck in shit, better start digging
Yourself out the hole that you be resting
caused by the shit that you be screaming
while i watch from the sideline, peering and looking
while my punches be, knocking and hooking
you shadow into the valley of death, shivering and shaking
if you dont get eaten you'll be spat out while im spitting
boy, im like a timebomb, im just waiting and ticking.
#Tell me what you think
Cheers
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hey yo. this was pretty good. the flow was pretty consistent. the structure was uneven. try to keep it even up. some people can keep it straight for the most part. but just try to keep it straight all the way through. the rhymescheme was different but still I liked this. for a beginner it was pretty dope. you got some nice potential. try to encorporate some multies and some new vocabulary in there. switch up the rhyme scheme to. instead of the last word rhymin make it the last two words rhymin.
overall dope. keep writin and droppin.
-Peace.
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