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The movement
From where corn grows to dudes with corn rows
Horny dudes looking for ways addicted to pornos
Stereotypes brought within the white mind
Sayin you not real unless you the right kind
Im not blind, I see right through the eyes
Men in disguise in suits thinkin they wise
The wrong man dies in a style so hostile
Searchin for the man by usin a racial profile
Cause rodney king's police innocent by white jury
Reform the jury with some color jailed the dirty
Not all, but justice must be served somehow
Racism has me raisin eyebrows at the white house
Malcolm X didn't advocate violence but no respect
Martin gets all the shit from most whites but no effect
Lets have a malcolm x day but he was islamic
But we witness on tv shakin ass and hydrolics?
RIP to both martin and malcolm, the true leaders
And lives the cheaters scummin all the teachers?
People think ya gotta be black to support the movement
Im white and smarter than televisions amusement
Hip hop portrayed as disney world to entertain whites
A type of minstrel show with the stage and bright lights
To say im not the right type, im a human with white skin
But that collapses when exploitation of mike tyson
Just look at all the shit he has been charged with
Now the witness takes the stand pleading the fiftth
Some people dont want this to persist or exist
So I write these verses but seem to be missed
Post them up on sites with couple say its the shit
Ignored my verses than said its dope not lookin at it
Im the rarity of who you see walkin on streets
In a way like 2pac I can be the rose from concrete
Nation of Islam leader today minster Farrakhan
A little controversial but thats what runs this marathon
Not a stampede but look at possible benefits to society
Its better than tryin to knock away groups entirely
Jesse Jackson and Al sharpton are gettin old
So whose gonna transfer the message they told
Keep hope alive and fight for true equal rights
So millions more can take society to a new height
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Yo dude.
You need two links.
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Aiight yo here is the first feed.
Nice plot you know i really felt this peice.
Great flow and creativity you got those down.
The only thing is.
Change your structre.
Senter it and make the words smaller or something.
You got skillz we all can see that.
Maby we can do a collab soon.
G/L with the feed back.
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uppin, i tried before to make it smaller but it didnt work, more feedback please.
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Nice piece here homie.I really liked how you approched the topic on this.You had a good opener which opened my eyes more to read your piece.And as I go down the piece you had came real strong with the Imagry and the emotion.The Imagry was really good cuz when I read your piece I could picture what was going on in your piece real good.And the emotion in this piece was deep cuz when I was reading the piece I could really feel the emotion in your piece.And your structure was good.And your use of vocabulary was good too.And you were real creative and complex with the topic.Keep up the good work.Hope to see more soon :angelsmil
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A played sort of topic, but well illustraited. The vocab you used was at just the right level to keep me reading and play off the length of this. The imagery was straightforward but effective. Some more multis would've been good to see. A more original topic would've been great to see but you handled it well.
Keep posting.
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Yo thanks for the feedback guys. Uppin again, glad to hear from u johnny, u one of the best here and thanks to va to man, like to hear from u and anyone about my piece andn one are bullshit answers. Deeply appreciate that.
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