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Scraped Knees.
Its a Long fall from the top,hoping all that doesnt shatter is your dream
Because while you fall you try to hold onto it , craving as a fiend
as your mind lays out a lighter, pipe, match and a spoon
and you'd suck dick, before you let all you have reach its doom
See, all we ever really need is an excuse to live for something else
But hey,we get sidelined, a little dust wont hurt as it sits on the shelf
And sometimes we seem to lose sight at we originally wanted
Our Focus runs away, It loses track, Even he gets exhausted
And hey, we'll keep on chasing, atleast while we are in bed asleep
Green with Envy, a paper bill, outta nowhere, leads away your sheep
So you surround yourself, with as much of your "new friend" as you need
Until you recieve the reciept, The devil bought off all your self esteem
You look at the mirror, and you see a reflection yet your not really in it
your a sex slave to your money, yet you dont really spend it
It spends you and you ask for help but nobody's ever really there
Because you blew off your friends, sold em out 'cuz cash is all that cared
So you thought, so you reach for the thing that never left
you get the tallest ladder, and reach for your dream on the top shelf
And you reach and remember having this since you were a little Kid
the ladder falls, just as you remember, to get this what wouldnt you give
Its a Long fall from the top,hoping all that doesnt shatter is your dream
You fall and it breaks, But you put your dream back together..
...And walk away with scraped knees...
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cmon people lets get into some replies, its not often i drop anymore... matter of fact its not often my crew drops
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remember....keep it fresh man.............
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youll get it.... i give you some props man.......
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chack it.......wanna battle????? you got it man..... so???????????
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ohh yeah....thT PUT EM BACK TOGETHER WAS TIGHT.............
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What the fuck, can i get real feedback
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This was an ok piece.
The money spends you part...
Made sense or I looked at it as , I am
a shopaholic in away so when I spend so much
money and not saving it's pretty much a never
ending cycle of steadly working hard but buying
materialistic things in just a second.
Anyways just my thought.
Some lines made me think like the topic
nothing great nothing wow but decent.
Flowed pretty good.
Ok drop overall.
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dammit man
illus, thanks for the feed, its my first om in months.
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The way you connected perspectives was dope
but i wasn't too crazy about this piece
regardless, i did dig this, as i do alot of your work
cause the wit and wording are always there
Nice piece man.
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This peice was not bad at all man. Im not quite sure why its getting slept on, I guess thats just how it is around here, but, the topic was good. I meen, its more like the concept that made this peice was it is, you really grasped it, and theres somewhat some heavy metaphors in here that some kids just wont get. Which is probly why your getting lousy feed. Anyway, I can bable on about the structure and what not, but I'll get to the point, the multies, and flow were nice, they connected very well, actually, they were choppy here and there, I felt like you tryed to fit to many words in such little space, read it over and narrow it down, is what I do. The vocabulary, was good, no need to really talk about that alot. But for real, the concept you grasped good, you put some emotion in this, and the facts stayed true to reality. Great job in my opinion.
Overall, I felt like you did very well, I enjoyed this read alot, and you did a good job on this. Keep it up man, I see much, MUCH potential in your topical/poetry ability. And Im looking forward to seeing more from you in the future.
Check out my peice. Thanks.
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Well, Skiddz, its bee a while since I've read anything from you
but I enjoyed this piece. Nice little message inside the piece
and it seems pretty common to me. Sacrifices are constantly
made for ones self, whether it be to make more money etc..
everybody does it no and again. For the piece itself,
the mechanics were cool. It was easy enough to read,
fairly simple, and the content was interesting and kept me
reading. I think you should stay active and keep writing, man.
Because reading this, it si better than most of the shit on here
nowadays. Especially the quote-
as your mind lays out a lighter, pipe, match and a spoon
and you'd suck dick, before you let all you have reach its doom
Flowed perfectly. A real easy read, and like I said before
the content is well on point. Props.
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