Ugly feelingz

im gonna drop this verse it was written just off top of head,
but im happy with it Enjoy...


a individual that duals with all things lyrical\
from bliss to unreal, i use words instead of fist's to get physical\\
trails of scared pattens leave burns on my mind\
maybe im lost in time,as i vomit my thoughts with a written rhyme\\
a fearsome puppet dosed in realism and lose wires\
day2day goverment liars,
that comebined chemiclas in brain to light fires\\
i hardly had a education i take the world with patience\
nobody gives a fuck you gotta survive,with day2day tasks you will be facng\\
take it as you will this not fiction this statement is real\
maybe people need to steal things,
the world go's round like the feelings you feel\\
like judging or judged by others or to judge thi mother\
parents or parent, fartherless im heartless but my mum seems to suffer\\
what we use for cover a deep hurt that nobodys seeing\
enable to drop the armor, expose what lays benife them ugly feelings\\
wishing things become reality it seems where dreaming\
with empty books a story is told,
like that cold feeling as i lay staring at ceelings\\
i lauged manically as these feelings turned to insainty\
spellbound on deep thoughts,
i panic to figure out in future what i wanna be\\
escaping demons immpossible i should ask for more\
creaking doors and twisting floors,
tempted to cut off my foot like that toff in saw\\
infamously im loose on scean a alternative amputee\
instruments sent to kill rhythmically,
with a loose hand like in the adams family\\

i feel you fams a 100%....good science. i liked the topic. you stayed on it, but the flow was off sometimes. the structure was nice, vocab was str8....the whole concept was clear. very understandable to read.....8/10

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i feel this poetic yet scientific and still street every aspect was covered in content i like that alot and look forward to seeing more work from you.

big thanks to you both for the feedback,
ive been on other sites and its hard to get feedback
no worrys more to come soon and again cheers for the feedback...