Pulse (Yes, i'm back)

Just a quick 16 to paint a sick scene, enjoy it bitches.


Pulse

Like an artist without paint, i'm drawing a blank
Caught in a trance, empty headed, boring the ranks
Out of practise, letting loose some stuttering sylabbles
Trying to move from spluttering rituals to uttering miracles
Back on the pulse like heart monitors, regaining my status
Insane in the matrix, bystanders are amazed that i made this
Gaining momentum with iron bars and, now i've bent them
Smashing through the guttersnipes, cronies and henchmen
Let me remind you of events when, in the hall of fame
I cleaned the trapestries i wove and searched for more to gain
shot a ball of flame, burned those oaken doors to the ground
and emerged a super saiyan with a roar and a pound
of the strongest hallucinagenic to make the mind so hectic
and deck dicks, so never sweat it, i can grant your deathwish
i'm back on the pulse to make tracks to assault
bring a smack to default cats who snap as a result



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=259338

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=258832

Yay johnny's back......i havent read it yet but i can tell its short and sweet.........wow this was dope......the multis were everywere.....the topic is kinda played but u made the om and the reader yours.......you should have made this longer.......u put me in suspence when i ended readin it, hopefully u didnt mean to....meanie.......overall a very dope peice, ur very talented

yo this was fuckin dope all aspects of it period the flow the strutcure the ryme scheme everythin and if u made this longer it be even better
leave feed on my om what happens next

gd drop...kept my attention all the way thru...gd comeback piece
flowed well
gd structure
gd rhymin thruout
some imagery but didnt really need it

keep @ it, 8.5/10



can u comment on this drop
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=259521
its my version on Backstabber by Eminem, the best i could do without biting
much appreciate it

WOW that was hella good
welcome back

damn....this was real dope....i was feelin every bit of this drop man.....you had good rhymes..mulites were good too.....flow was reallly smooth and strucutere was even..vocab was good too..topic was ionteresting...and i liked it.....my favorite lines were -
Back on the pulse like heart monitors, regaining my status
Insane in the matrix, bystanders are amazed that i made this

good drop overall...peace-

yeah well i'd say its decent..
a bit short and undeveloped as a complete OM..
but good poetic qyualities all the same..
nice multies and play on words was good

stay @

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Enjoyed the read, nice everything

I think its an ok om.Not the best iv read from most of your oms but its ok.The multies like most of the time i read from you were good.Alot of those and the storyline was ok.Vocab was ok,and the structure was good.Seen a few topics like this yet this one was lil different.

Welcome back man,and hope to see more.
Also if you could answer this why isnt there any tryouts for Def Poets society?

Cheers for the feedback fella's, uppin this thing one time ^^