Feed Tha Poor

verse 1

yo this is hard to believe,
all the guverments are to vein to see,
about poorness in all most every country,
like tupac said"they got money for wars but can't feed the poors",
that should be somthing we all wanna do not hate it like choirs,
they must feel like hookers because every night there gettin floored,
we waste more food then they've ever saw,
and we all got more food in our houses then they have got stored,
some one needs to explain to me where all our money keeps goin,
they might aswell on the advetizments say "keep throwing"
and still the population of poor people keep growing,
they keep most of our money we send to the countrys with out us knowing,
and they need that money to get clean food,
its christmas man stop actin like scrooge,

chorus.
this song is for those poor familys who can't efford food,
christmas presents,water,and cloths so they walk around nude,
but try and stick it out cuz help is commin real soon,

[repeat 2] (the voice of nate dogg sang the chorus lol)

verse 2

now i saw this on the t.v a few weeks ago,
it was a documentry in africa you should see the clips they shown,
it was enough to make a dead man moan,
you should see how skinny this one girl wass-she was only 4 yrs old,
thats sick man thats needs to be sorted with not just told,
but were tryna do the best we can,
we had band aid since the 80's man,
and thats to raise money for the poor,
if only they had t.vs man they could of saw,
about the people that care building up to more,
thats it man i think i made my point,
stop and think about how lucky we are before u spark tht joint......


k so can u get some feed back no hate !!!!

Yo Uppin For Some Feed Back......................

nice piece
gd topic
flowed alrite
rhymed well - but bit simple
gd read
7/10
keep it up

yea thank uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnn...........................

good flow... not feelin the chorus..... but basic rhyme scheme..... liked everything else...........(feat. me next time)

Decent verses man.......i wasnt feelin the chorus either...stay up tho...nice rhyming, coulda had a better vocab tho......you could also use internals to make it flow better..ya dig? no hate tho.stay up dawg.....and this was a nice topic too homie.