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LLL Jr. Week 5
Clean up week
last week alot of people were booted for various reasons
there gone for now
as for the rest of you good job on dropping and giving a shit
normal rules check by wednesday drop by friday
drop early if possible
good luck :2thumb:
Checking in, want to go 20?
Check. Yep 20 is cool, let's make it a good battle.
You write based on opponent skill and last week u had Mac,Quote:
Originally Posted by DaTrusHurtz
He's a pretty dope battler...which just proves you're ALWAYS whack,
Battling on the nets ya life, but really know something man,
I mean, your punches fail to connect so how they ever gonna LAN?
My punches are hard, enough to make anyones verse corrupt,
They hit you from so many angles Surround Sound would bankrupt,
Watching Narnia with ya mum when ya got home, that whore owns,
Ironic tho...cos I was lion n the Witch was hid in the Wardrobe,
You won't set benchmarks as champ, ya drops are old and bored,
As battling the mag writer is the only way you'll drop a Record,
My Genesis is to hit punches that'll make ya pain chronic,
Cos my Knuckles will cause your head to spin round like Sonic,
You gay faggot, ya into sweaty dudes who bust a blood vessel,
Lifted while ya heads between mens legs...n u don't wrestle,
Props don't go to you from anyone dude, so know ya place,
Cos the only time DA gets respect...is during a court case,
Trus verses are definitely weird as fuck, but let me probe,
His punches are foreign to us...and everyone here's a xenophobe,
I'm gettin predicted against lots but thats part of the thrill,
Same happened with LG, Yugo, K n Zaster...and now look who's 4-0.
*Checks time*.....11:39 PM......Guess I'm right on time :)
Peeps have read all ya wack shit, you scare no man dude
I mean I seen my best bookend more rap careers than you
We all think your wack, but ya deserve a chance to please
I mean after all... is usually where ya finish in leagues
Homeless fuck, shouldn't be so excited about tv, ya hoe
So curb your enthusiasm, to sit right next to your home
Do anything to not be alone, but ya not homeless n' shit,
You got a model home...
...but ONLY cuz you kidnapped the bitch
You ain't life of a party, got a fact you might fear ho
I heard the last time ya got a Buzz was a LIGHTYEAR ago
Ya music entices no one, you'll never be feeble, bum
Damn dawg ya shitty wordplay couldn't even tweedle-dum
I was the shit in school, but to the fags, I spite them
N' ya know, only the BIGGEST geeks n' losers, like Kem
Damn ya wack n' how much ya suck is leavin' me tinglin'
But your good in away...
...so stay the fuck far away in England n'
I've won the title twice, for you to win is the plan dude
You'd be Grand Champ... except he's much better than you
I'm a doctor n' I've caused lots of bruises to view man
Shittt, I seen a papercut...
...up a nigga more than you can
You write based on opponent skill and last week u had Mac,
He's a pretty dope battler...which just proves you're ALWAYS whack,
..aiight. wording..
Battling on the nets ya life, but really know something man,
I mean, your punches fail to connect so how they ever gonna LAN?
..lol. pretty cool..
My punches are hard, enough to make anyones verse corrupt,
They hit you from so many angles Surround Sound would bankrupt,
..nah..
Watching Narnia with ya mum when ya got home, that whore owns,
Ironic tho...cos I was lion n the Witch was hid in the Wardrobe,
..lol. i guess..
You won't set benchmarks as champ, ya drops are old and bored,
As battling the mag writer is the only way you'll drop a Record,
..meh. aiight..
My Genesis is to hit punches that'll make ya pain chronic,
Cos my Knuckles will cause your head to spin round like Sonic,
..pretty good..
You gay faggot, ya into sweaty dudes who bust a blood vessel,
Lifted while ya heads between mens legs...n u don't wrestle,
..could've been worded better to be more effective..
Props don't go to you from anyone dude, so know ya place,
Cos the only time DA gets respect...is during a court case,
..lol. nice..
Trus verses are definitely weird as fuck, but let me probe,
His punches are foreign to us...and everyone here's a xenophobe,
..yea, maybe..
I'm gettin predicted against lots but thats part of the thrill,
Same happened with LG, Yugo, K n Zaster...and now look who's 4-0.
..naw. just a statement..
vs.
Peeps have read all ya wack shit, you scare no man dude
I mean I seen my best bookend more rap careers than you
..yea. pretty good..
We all think your wack, but ya deserve a chance to please
I mean after all... is usually where ya finish in leagues
..lol. funny..
Homeless fuck, shouldn't be so excited about tv, ya hoe
So curb your enthusiasm, to sit right next to your home
..lol, cool..
Do anything to not be alone, but ya not homeless n' shit,
You got a model home...
...but ONLY cuz you kidnapped the bitch
..pretty good..
You ain't life of a party, got a fact you might fear ho
I heard the last time ya got a Buzz was a LIGHTYEAR ago
..naw. play'd. seen it a few times before..
Ya music entices no one, you'll never be feeble, bum
Damn dawg ya shitty wordplay couldn't even tweedle-dum
..lol. aiight..
I was the shit in school, but to the fags, I spite them
N' ya know, only the BIGGEST geeks n' losers, like Kem
..aiight..
Damn ya wack n' how much ya suck is leavin' me tinglin'
But your good in away...
...so stay the fuck far away in England n'
..aiight..
I've won the title twice, for you to win is the plan dude
You'd be Grand Champ... except he's much better than you
..ok..
I'm a doctor n' I've caused lots of bruises to view man
Shittt, I seen a papercut...
...up a nigga more than you can
..nice..
ok, so i see it as kemp having a pretty well put together verse. some things could work on wording and a few more harder hitting concepts, and you'll be good. dope shit man. datrus, a lot more wittier punches. had me laugh at a few lines and that closer was dope. real good job, to both.
v/ datrushurtz
Trus-
I've won the title twice, for you to win is the plan dude
You'd be Grand Champ... except he's much better than you
Kemp-
You gay faggot, ya into sweaty dudes who bust a blood vessel,
Lifted while ya heads between mens legs...n u don't wrestle,
Nice battle, but i have to go with trus here for a much better verse, he had more complexity and really did a good job.
v/trus
ima g ima g DIPSET.
You write based on opponent skill and last week u had Mac,
He's a pretty dope battler...which just proves you're ALWAYS whack,
^^ meh..
Battling on the nets ya life, but really know something man,
I mean, your punches fail to connect so how they ever gonna LAN?
^^ played but nice
My punches are hard, enough to make anyones verse corrupt,
They hit you from so many angles Surround Sound would bankrupt,
^^ Surround Sound aint a business..and it doesnt rhyme
Watching Narnia with ya mum when ya got home, that whore owns,
Ironic tho...cos I was lion n the Witch was hid in the Wardrobe,
^^ wtf?
You won't set benchmarks as champ, ya drops are old and bored,
As battling the mag writer is the only way you'll drop a Record,
^^ not even a punch... why would he want to DROP a record?
My Genesis is to hit punches that'll make ya pain chronic,
Cos my Knuckles will cause your head to spin round like Sonic,
^^ his head doesnt spin.....
You gay faggot, ya into sweaty dudes who bust a blood vessel,
Lifted while ya heads between mens legs...n u don't wrestle,
^^ very bad wording
Props don't go to you from anyone dude, so know ya place,
Cos the only time DA gets respect...is during a court case,
^^ not bad
Trus verses are definitely weird as fuck, but let me probe,
His punches are foreign to us...and everyone here's a xenophobe,
^^ no
I'm gettin predicted against lots but thats part of the thrill,
Same happened with LG, Yugo, K n Zaster...and now look who's 4-0.
^^ no rhyme :hump:
vs.
Peeps have read all ya wack shit, you scare no man dude
I mean I seen my best bookend more rap careers than you
^^ harshness
We all think your wack, but ya deserve a chance to please
I mean after all... is usually where ya finish in leagues
^^ dope
Homeless fuck, shouldn't be so excited about tv, ya hoe
So curb your enthusiasm, to sit right next to your home
^^ lol
Do anything to not be alone, but ya not homeless n' shit,
You got a model home...
...but ONLY cuz you kidnapped the bitch
^^ haha nice
You ain't life of a party, got a fact you might fear ho
I heard the last time ya got a Buzz was a LIGHTYEAR ago
^^ havent seen but not really feeling it
Ya music entices no one, you'll never be feeble, bum
Damn dawg ya shitty wordplay couldn't even tweedle-dum
^^ corny
I was the shit in school, but to the fags, I spite them
N' ya know, only the BIGGEST geeks n' losers, like Kem
^^ lmao
Damn ya wack n' how much ya suck is leavin' me tinglin'
But your good in away...
...so stay the fuck far away in England n'
^^ harsh
I've won the title twice, for you to win is the plan dude
You'd be Grand Champ... except he's much better than you
^^ meh...
I'm a doctor n' I've caused lots of bruises to view man
Shittt, I seen a papercut...
...up a nigga more than you can
^^ lol harsh
Kempo u came extremely weak, no personals, u missed rhymes, and ur punches didnt hit hard at all. DTH had some dope punches that were harsh and hit directly.. so
V/ DTH
You won't set benchmarks as champ, ya drops are old and bored,
As battling the mag writer is the only way you'll drop a Record,
My Genesis is to hit punches that'll make ya pain chronic,
Cos my Knuckles will cause your head to spin round like Sonic,
You gay faggot, ya into sweaty dudes who bust a blood vessel,
Lifted while ya heads between mens legs...n u don't wrestle,
Props don't go to you from anyone dude, so know ya place,
Cos the only time DA gets respect...is during a court case,
Trus verses are definitely weird as fuck, but let me probe,
His punches are foreign to us...and everyone here's a xenophobe,
main thing kempo needs to work on is wording. also, LAN line was played.
vs.
We all think your wack, but ya deserve a chance to please
I mean after all... is usually where ya finish in leagues
Homeless fuck, shouldn't be so excited about tv, ya hoe
So curb your enthusiasm, to sit right next to your home
You ain't life of a party, got a fact you might fear ho
I heard the last time ya got a Buzz was a LIGHTYEAR ago
Ya music entices no one, you'll never be feeble, bum
Damn dawg ya shitty wordplay couldn't even tweedle-dum
I was the shit in school, but to the fags, I spite them
N' ya know, only the BIGGEST geeks n' losers, like Kem
tied in quotables, but I thought Datrus' hit a lot harder.. with better wordplay. Kem line was pretty sweet
v/ Datrus
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Thanks to everyone for voting, appreciated.
I'll leave feed on your battle tomorrow Sobe.
Kempo:
Props don't go to you from anyone dude, so know ya place,
Cos the only time DA gets respect...is during a court case,
Trus verses are definitely weird as fuck, but let me probe,
His punches are foreign to us...and everyone here's a xenophobe,
DaTrus:
We all think your wack, but ya deserve a chance to please
I mean after all... is usually where ya finish in leagues
I've won the title twice, for you to win is the plan dude
You'd be Grand Champ... except he's much better than you
Overall:Kempo, you had so many potential punches but
a lot of them were really forced with the wording. The DA punch was
definately your best, but the rest of your verse needs to be just
as good or there abouts.DaTrus, you had a pretty good verse
but your cliche's were just getting out of hand. They get boring too.
Try being more direct and get to the point.. Unless your wording
is going to be perfect. Good battle anyways guys.
Vote: DaTrus
You write based on opponent skill and last week u had Mac,
He's a pretty dope battler...which just proves you're ALWAYS whack,
ok
Battling on the nets ya life, but really know something man,
I mean, your punches fail to connect so how they ever gonna LAN?
played, but ok
My punches are hard, enough to make anyones verse corrupt,
They hit you from so many angles Surround Sound would bankrupt,
na
Watching Narnia with ya mum when ya got home, that whore owns,
Ironic tho...cos I was lion n the Witch was hid in the Wardrobe,
ok
You won't set benchmarks as champ, ya drops are old and bored,
As battling the mag writer is the only way you'll drop a Record,
meh
My Genesis is to hit punches that'll make ya pain chronic,
Cos my Knuckles will cause your head to spin round like Sonic,
ok
You gay faggot, ya into sweaty dudes who bust a blood vessel,
Lifted while ya heads between mens legs...n u don't wrestle,
wording off, but ok
Props don't go to you from anyone dude, so know ya place,
Cos the only time DA gets respect...is during a court case,
lol good
Trus verses are definitely weird as fuck, but let me probe,
His punches are foreign to us...and everyone here's a xenophobe,
nice
I'm gettin predicted against lots but thats part of the thrill,
Same happened with LG, Yugo, K n Zaster...and now look who's 4-0.
not a punch, but true lol
vs.
Peeps have read all ya wack shit, you scare no man dude
I mean I seen my best bookend more rap careers than you
nice
We all think your wack, but ya deserve a chance to please
I mean after all... is usually where ya finish in leagues
lol good
Homeless fuck, shouldn't be so excited about tv, ya hoe
So curb your enthusiasm, to sit right next to your home
nice
Do anything to not be alone, but ya not homeless n' shit,
You got a model home...
...but ONLY cuz you kidnapped the bitch
ok
You ain't life of a party, got a fact you might fear ho
I heard the last time ya got a Buzz was a LIGHTYEAR ago
na
Ya music entices no one, you'll never be feeble, bum
Damn dawg ya shitty wordplay couldn't even tweedle-dum
ok
I was the shit in school, but to the fags, I spite them
N' ya know, only the BIGGEST geeks n' losers, like Kem
aight
Damn ya wack n' how much ya suck is leavin' me tinglin'
But your good in away...
...so stay the fuck far away in England n'
ok
I've won the title twice, for you to win is the plan dude
You'd be Grand Champ... except he's much better than you
ok
I'm a doctor n' I've caused lots of bruises to view man
Shittt, I seen a papercut...
...up a nigga more than you can
nice
Pretty good match, but DTH came much more consistent imo. Both of u, keep it up.
V/DTH