lock up

hey this is my first free verse evr so BE NICE BUT BE CRITICAL I WANT FEED BACK!!!

all right here i' goes

yes u the show stopa
the head smacka
wipen out thugs wit ya beat
but i see u as awife beata
child hata
no rappa
u dont do it mayn its just plain wrong
gettin a ho on her knees so she can play wit yer dong
kicken daghter outa the house when she turned sixteen
now shes out side lyin pregnant on the street
you think ur god u all big an' bad
u just a lunitick bet chu wish u had
a family that luves u
could sit there beside u
on a cold cold night
while u ley there an' write
verse afta verse of meaningless shit
but u were the man u were supposed to be it
u aint no more ur family kicked u out
now u leyin onthe street
wonderin why how u got beat
at ur own game
no more rappers fame
stealin food to stay alive
most people think u should go ahead an die
u gone nobody cares u should be locked up
but u wont thats y this wold is so corrupt

uppin....

com on FEEDBACK BITCHES seriously i worked hard on this