Pass The Past?

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I’ve been passed on, but hey the past is gone/
as if asked I preach “what doesn’t last was wrong”/
so back on yer feet, let’s not stagger on/
Let’s not last too long on facts that only lead to a sadder song/
Cuz after-all, that shit was awful, ask tha broad/
Is was that lass’s fault, she's why my rap’s dissolved/
n every chap-involved will be fast ta fall... I'll attack em all/

Fuck i gotta switch this topic, this'll only get me started/
It's not a message I’ve imparted or some feelings I shoulda guarded/
Ooops, now I feel retarded,Shoulda saw it, shoulda caught it/
Shoulda swallowed my words ‘n’ followed thru with tha verse/
Performed it without sorrow ‘n’ hurt, Showed that logic is first/
Prove that somethin other than a bottle can work/
But a model was her, on the outside, inside was the insanity/
Gotta tell myself I did myself a favor, good riddance to the vanity/
Rise up like the man to be, swear not ta treat 'em like a brand to me/ Protectin ‘em from rain like I’m a canapé/
Always there to lend a helping hand when she-/
needs it cuz that’s her fantasy/

‘n’ when it’s done ‘n’ past it’s life it’s gun blasted/
outcast like a dumb bastard ‘n’ she laughs, it’s fun-tastic/
Love-actor, this whore ain’t nothing but a cum-basket/
Let her doom tha caskets ah some other dumb asses/
Hit the blunt, pass it: The only two actions left in my dome’s apti-tude/
... 'n' after a few/
Notice how I start actin’ rude, but it’s already happened dude/
‘n’ now I’m apt ta do a pack ah moves... they’ll all be real bad fo' you/

not bad..this had a lil tolo imple rhymes but your workin i can tell
this was pretty good man..topci was iight..vocba was iighht too
flow was iight and stuructre was good nicely done wit that.......
complexity wasnt ehre elevate on that man..i see you have potential
keep at it...peace

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It was tight ya lyrics was fresh and ya rymes was tight. I like ya style too

It was tight ya lyrics was fresh and ya rymes was tight. I like ya style too

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