LooK aT mE

Im new to tha beats, but i stay on my grind
Money is tha only thang on my mind!
My whip pretty nice, but imma make it betta
jus wait til i get tha chedda!
imma have big speakaz in tha back, bruh
big like the girl J Lo's back, bruh!
Imma roll down, bouncin to tha bass
u mad, but i gotta grin on my face!
black on black, thas how i get down
laugh at that, u really hatin now!
In ery seat i gotta screen
it go great wit ma gangsta lean!
if i want, ill push that button
Baby D got NoS.. aint that somethin!
I dont race, my car jus real fast
but if we line up imma dust that ass!

not bad but you need to up ya vocab to a more complex level to be considered good
flow was good and struuctre was even.....topic was iight...
rhymes were good..but not that complex.pretty simple but still descent...
overall this was a pretty ok drop...shirt but iight....keep elevating..
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thanks and peace

yeah i gotta go wit skribble man
it was simple but dool
like he said you had good structure and your flow was tight
you do need to up your vocab a little though
i know cuz im havin da same problem homie
just keep writing and youll get better
nice piece

not very creative but ive seen worse..
........need a better topic, summik more complex.
ps..where's ya linkz.

don't you guys get sick of writing about the same shit.....pick a different topic bud, your flow is just mediocre and your metaphors and vocab is minimal or nonexistant...spend more time on it instead of writing down the first things that come to mind...im sure you can come up with something better