3 Gods

THE 3 GODS

Sun God

I shone on Earth for more than a billion years
keep shinin knowin if i stop, i'll bring tears....
People will be sad and the planet will freeze
my brother, tha air god helps every nigga breathe
I got a trick up my sleeve,he helps not jus trees
hot as the sun witch i am, i'm over a million degreez
I look over the world with my eyes that you cant see
Lookin up at the shining star knowin your lookin at me

Air God

I Help get oxygen to the planet called Earth
Helpin the earth was my special task since birth
trees help too but i help plants stay alive
and people too, i help everbody survive.....
Everwhere you go i'm there over ya shoulder
The Air God which is mye... is the strongest...
if i wanna i could move a 5 ton boulder....
shred a folder,and can blow even colder...
I can freeze every person which i dont wan' do
If I did do that what the fuck you gon' do

Water God

Water makes up ya body and i support it
you cant take it out, dont try to abbort it
Water is a powerful, things can get destroyed.
talkin bout me now, wi'll make you void..
I take up more than half this fuckin planet
land should be more but i didnt plan it....
damn it..my life lasts forever and ever..
me and the sun god will never be together
i'll put him out in a second and i dont wanna
Water is used for your thing like growin marijuana
So listen up. what god will not help the earth?
In my mind.. myself....the water god, on a list is first

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man the 3 gods was deep
it was sweet and simple
you stayed on topic, which was cool
the water god especially stood out

7.5 keep posting i like what you do

This was mad simple man...it was kind of interesting but not what I was expecting...one god gave two lines to himself and about his job and then complimented the next god...only one god talked about himself, the other two gods were too busy talkin bout the air god....it was wierd to me...the rhymes were basic but good, structure and flow was pretty good, but this just seemed like a very weak drop to me from you skribble, I've seen you drop much better and this didn't impress me...nahmean?...keep droppin' tho...

iight..appeciate the feed..uppin

too simple and too little vocab. topic was real dope though.... stay up

thanks for the feed homie could have left a lil bigga feed but still thanks..uppin

yeah basically the schemes were serious lacking, the rhymes were toooo simple, and some were forced, the marajuwana line was hella forced aswell, I aitn feeling this one really, Xpected more from looking at ya post count nah mean?...ill keep an eye out.

My thoughts and opinions
I liked this peice i liked the set up i like the topic not a play'd topic at all only seen the topic once and that was just now i think you got mad potential
my feed on structer
it was nice everything fitted together almost perfectly

my feed on wordplay
i liked the word play its was interesting to be honest it helped my understanding of this peice

my feed on vocab
there wasnt really a wide range of vocab in this peice but it didnt effect the emotion and the other good points of this the vocab was simple

Over all feed
i liked this peice i think it was very insitefull keep up the good work you have alot of potential so keep up and you'll be a great artist oneday

over all ranking
8/10

yea i no this was simple and was bored check out my new drop with freestyle king now thats a tight drop wit sum serious rhymes and a good story

This piece right here was aight.You had a good storyline and thats good.But I felt that you had lacked on your Imagry and emotion cuz I think you could have went deeper with this piece.But it was still good though don't get me wrong but I think it could have been deeper.And you had a good structure and good use of your vocabulary too.And also this piece was real creative too.Kepp up the good work hope to see more from you soon.

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Originally Posted by Showoff

man the 3 gods was deep
it was sweet and simple
you stayed on topic, which was cool
the water god especially stood out

7.5 keep posting i like what you do

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so true nice verse but i give it 8-10

thanks....for the feed....uppin