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..Poetic Instinct..
...Poetic Instinct...
...Live life for the seconds because it was I that did Not.
I reminded myself of uneaten apples, Destined to Rot...
The Will be done as My life Pass me By out of the blue...
...Sarrow brings out the Poetic instinct as I become new.
....Depression is the passion I live. A hatred of obsession,
Fear of the wrong confession. Fear of ruthless agression;
I watch my own life fade away as my life begins to torch,
Then I step onto the front porch and even my home.......
.................................Just starts to flame and scortch;
My Sadness grows into a multi-million dollar family death,
People watched my life fade away as I used every breath;
I was engulfed in flames. Even water couldn't save my life,
No body even cared. No mother, no brother, even my wife;
Prison was like the only Sane place to replace my name...
My case the saying was, "Hate the player, I got no game;"
Life turned out insane...My past caught up to my Pain.....
And Unlike a homless person. I turned away a simple grain;
Short but sweet, I end it with utter and complete sarrow..
But I did live to see another day..................................
..................................Until death comes in the Marrow;
...Live life for the seconds because it was I that did Not.
I reminded myself of uneaten apples, Destined to Rot...
The Will be done as My life Pass me By out of the blue...
...Sarrow brings out the Poetic instinct as I become new.
*~Big Nash~*
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this was tight
small ass font man
strcuutre was good
flow was smooth
topic was cool.i liked it
keep at it homie.....
hery can you leave feed on my drop
its called eteranl rest..thanks
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hmm more of my type of text. I like you had a topical concept to it. Some rhymes are weak for a chorus and i felt you could hae improved the chorus. Overall the piece felt very emotional and the imagery was good. Good piece overall.
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Thanks for feed...Yeah I'll go look at that later skribble...I didn't really try on this one lol...It was more of a blind topic...Nothing pre-written about it, I just went with what I had in my head...It came out decent enough...lol...UPP~2
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Uppin.................Feed please
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aww man this was a real real real hot peice why you aint post it in the peotry forum anyways your verse was pretty hot i liked this alot you had some real good imaginary i was feeling that a whole bunch you structure was to perfect
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Uppin 4 feed...thanks jayjay...
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pretty nicely put together fosho..tight structure had sum coo rhymes throughout...
vocab was used well...flow was consistant..
was just a bit too short
nicely written still mos def has originality to it
stay up
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Nice OM, it had good visualization and it was very complex. Nice vocab on there too.
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Best Line,
My Sadness grows into a multi-million dollar family death,
People watched my life fade away as I used every breath;
I loved this piece man straight up. the flow was tight and the structure was fuckin dope. I loved the description in this and the set up was sick. but try to stay away from using the ........... shit it just doesnt cut it man, it takes away from the lyrical skill a true emcee possesses. you got mad potential man just keep droppin every time possible and the things will light up for you man. straight up
-Peace
when you get a chance peep my open mics.
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Vortex...Exact...Isis...thanks for puting time in your scheduals to actually read my shit...Good looking and thanks for the complaments/tips...Isis I'll go look at your shit right now...thanks for looking..Upp!
