Islam The Peaceful - Second Drop Peep It

Islam the peaceful

the beast im here to rep my religion/
dont let a few men from the east, influence ur impression/
Islam is peaceful, we live by the five pillars/
ask any sane muslim n he'll say fuck the 9/11 killers/
pillar 1 god is only and mohamed is the prophet/
a great man who left his mark like the smoke off rockets/
pillar 2 we pray 5 times a day, its called salat/
in our own special way ,show god we appreciate alot/
we big ballers, pillar 3 shows u where the money at/
alms giving, nigga we pay zakat/
we drop fat money clips in EXPO 7/1/2 fitted hats/
the 4th pillar is great, pilgrimage or hajj/
muslims are never bait, neva fuck with the badge/
the fifth, the final, to fast during ramadan/
and believe me when the sun sets u eat like pac man/
the culture is rich, and the table by the food is covered/
the day is a bitch, but at night im with family and brothers/
so dont brand us with stereotypes we mean u no harm/
not every sinlgle one of us is a walking bomb/
cuz the only thing thats tickin is a pure mass in the chest/
the same one in all of us, that stops when allah puts us to rest/
allah is but 1 of gods 99 islamic names/
islam preaches peace, not the politics of the insane/
and u heard of the khoran, we straight by the book/
dont be ignorant as to just brand people just by their looks/
cuz we all victims of terrorism, jews, muslims n christians/
on 9/11 each suffered losses caused by 8 air plane engines/

Hit me up this is the beast from the middleast reppin MTL and Islam.

Edit: Forgetting to put in words~

not bad not bad i give it about a 7/10 keep up the good work

thx lamb check out the edited version i aded what i forgot to paste nigg, respect for comment

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Kind of basic and could use more variety...you seemed all over the place with the topic and a little distracted...try not to stray away and use less of these "///\\\" aswell...OM's are also about making it an easy read for the people...those ^^^ just throw off the flow...Other than that it's good for a begining...keep up the good work and return feed in the open mic in my signature..."Poetic Instinct"

thx for the comments guys

Good portrayal of some key aspects of islam, if ya want we can do a colab bout islam as well, stay up

Yeah I agree with all the above comments. Its good you took another perspective on something people dont seem to understand. IOveral floow seemed okay throughout. Content waschill. Just up the complexity. Take away those "//"

word up, reppin the muslim community! alah u akbar

Yo dog. I actually sorta liked this. Although the rhyming itself was pretty simple and unimpressive, your topic was really good because I could tell you were passionate about it. So yea, basically, keep writing about topics that you are passionate about, but trying incorporating more vocab and writing techniques to make your writing more interesting.

I say this is not bad good rhymes flow was good..struxutre was good too but jus elevate a bit on vocab...i say keep at it and keep improving every time you drop.....overall thiswas like a 6..5/10......peace