Freedom of Choice

I'm writing the instances where we've been blinded by images,
With the lies and percentages when our Rights are still limited,
So I'd advise that you benefit from these ties in my sentences,
As I rise from these premises to visualize these predicaments,
Institutionalized witnesses, victims of critics with voices,
Stick to Amendments defending the hypocrites and the choices,
And the Christians exploited paying expenses in portions,
Tithes are twisted and significant to spending, extortion,
So relinquish these noises that try to implement shit,
With innovations, degrading everyones citizenship,
More influential it gets, and adaptation if normally,
With the relation to what psychologists say to conformity,
We're complacent unknowingly, living life like a fool,
Devices and cues; Rely, apply, then abide by the rules,
We stay silenced, unmoved, and we accept that we watch,
Don't go indepth, except that we're scared to step out the box,
Because of death and the plots, believers evaporated,
The Act of Hatred, most of our greatest leaders were assasinated,
So we relax in sanctions, instead of embracing advancements,
No changing and planning, just lacking in taking advantage,
So we face it and panic, can't expand lets be honest,
Every land and Administration quietly ran by the Congress,
Hand in Hand some are punished, by credible services,
Neglected for purposes due to differences and medical disturbances,
Disrespectful occurences, critically debated in time,
Transgenders and gays are still viciously hated in crimes,
But that fades in our mind, we stay shelled and it rages me,
That Jefferson sign's to 'freedom', while Clotel's in slavery,
You can't tell, but it's blatantly not a choice nor given,
Different sorts depending because it's either forced or a gimmick,
Names forged and written, accepting every typical column,
Reading literal terms turned into political problems,
From criminal stardom, we supply accordingly to the foes,
Disproportioned ghettos, yet they still strive for minority votes,
More importantly though, lets go back and stand by the flaws,
Blacks were 'free', but ran by Jim Crow and the grandfather clause,
Yet we still stand all in awe, constantly too restricted to blame,
Go back to being inflicted, now we're too timid to complain,
Not being too specific to name, but I'm feeding the course,
That just because we're free, doesn't mean we have a freedom of choice.

11/11/05

-Nique.




Writer's Note: In case no one knew, Thomas Jefferson (one of our presidents) was notably famous for the Declaration of Independence. You know, the whole 'We are Free and Equal' notion, yet he had two daughters that were in slavery by the names of Clotel and Althesa, who were mulatto children. William Wells Brown (Author) wrote a novel called Clotel (should read it).

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damn.....this had sum sick..complex, excellent..vocab......flow was smooth all the way...strucutre was even..perfect.....rhymes were awsome...complex and i cant beleive how good tey are....wicked creative with the topic...i was feelin it......overall this was like a 9.9/10..keep it up..peace

Dopeness...everything was dope here...vocab...flow...structure...rhymes...topic.. .approach to the topic...

Everything was just straight dopeness...keep that shit up...I liked it...:amazed:

Will you be my girlfriend??? :love:

Because of death and the plots, believers evaporated,
The Act of Hatred, most of our greatest leaders were assasinated,
So we relax in sanctions, instead of embracing advancements,
No changing and planning, just lacking in taking advantage,
So we face it and panic, can't expand lets be honest,
Every land and Administration quietly ran by the Congress,
Hand in Hand some are punished, by credible services,
Neglected for purposes due to differences and medical disturbances,
Disrespectful occurences, critically debated in time,
Transgenders and gays are still viciously hated in crimes,
But that fades in our mind, we stay shelled and it rages me,
That Jefferson sign's to 'freedom', while Clotel's in slavery,



Damn.
that was a hard ass section.
im love with your tight flow.
its sooo.. sexy. like your tight abs after practice.
And the metaphors just bubble up from the page like the hot steamy bath scene we be having. And your imagery is iller then the naked pictures i took of you. Damn. i aint think you could write better then you please but ...woah

Lol Ill drop yo.

good topic...imagery was off for me, but the shit had complexity a lil bit of history, feedin the people knowledge, this piece was felt, good flow throughout the verse..
peep the OM in my sig

Elevate.

nice text verse... good content... blah at everything else... you know how I feel.

Rise.

Wow niquey, this shit was raw. I've been trying to post this verse for a MINUTE scimming thru shit to read, but nothing i could read for more then 2-3 minutes on the from page. But this was dope. A Long peice indeed but i was kept interested the whole time. Your usual mind ripping flow and great, great story. This was fantastic nique. Keep writing girl.


zp

Damn this was actually pretty dope, Keep up the work!

Rise like..like..

Whoo...another good drop...this shit was dope...vocab was on another level...the flow stayed real nice through the whole thing which is difficult in long pieces...good flow...this shit was for real cold...peace.
-Play-Boy

i liked the flow ..good vocab ..structure was good overall this was a nice piece

i already nominated this for legends so it's pretty obvious how i feel about this.. but i gotta get another link for my om.

this shit was dope as fuck. i loved the message the message this sent and i agree with the main point.. about not having a freedom of choice. your vocab, content, and flow was all off the hook. here's my favorite lines:

I'm writing the instances where we've been blinded by images,
With the lies and percentages when our Rights are still limited,
So I'd advise that you benefit from these ties in my sentences,
As I rise from these premises to visualize these predicaments,
Institutionalized witnesses, victims of critics with voices,
Stick to Amendments defending the hypocrites and the choices,
And the Christians exploited paying expenses in portions,
Tithes are twisted and significant to spending, extortion,

Because of death and the plots, believers evaporated,
The Act of Hatred, most of our greatest leaders were assasinated,
So we relax in sanctions, instead of embracing advancements,
No changing and planning, just lacking in taking advantage,
So we face it and panic, can't expand lets be honest,
Every land and Administration quietly ran by the Congress,
Hand in Hand some are punished, by credible services,
Neglected for purposes due to differences and medical disturbances,
Disrespectful occurences, critically debated in time,
Transgenders and gays are still viciously hated in crimes,

More importantly though, lets go back and stand by the flaws,
Blacks were 'free', but ran by Jim Crow and the grandfather clause,
Yet we still stand all in awe, constantly too restricted to blame,
Go back to being inflicted, now we're too timid to complain,
Not being too specific to name, but I'm feeding the course,
That just because we're free, doesn't mean we have a freedom of choice.

shit.. i felt most of your verse it looks like. anyway, good drop.. dopest i've seen from you yet nique. pzez.

you stuck on this stuff arent you....this topic..u killed it