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The BoomBox.
T h e B o o m B o x
Location:Philipines.A woman named Glendale was given a gift.It was a boombox.To you it might seem like nothing and not a big a deal,but it is.
A loving mother of three,caring and wanting best for her children
Wanting them to take an education,be cleansefull with out sin
One of her daughters Glendale...Saw something behind a store window
Her mother saw her daughter,with a shine in her eye,a bright glow
She looked inside her pocket,only to find three dollars and 5 cents
It hurt her in a sence that she couldnt git Glendale that as a present
She worked hard and well,getting many jobs,every single day
Cause it was until that day,she got her way,the gift wasnt too far away
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Inside the store she saw it,a boom box wrapped in a locks
She knows this isnt worth it,but she takes money out of the sock
Knonks on the counter,waiting for a woman wit beautifull hair
And she knew there the future for her daughter was good,she sweared
Gives the money to the lady,and goes outside with much joy
Suddenly,a man comes telling her to give up radio or git blown away
Not knowing what to do,she cared for life,she hands it to him
He leaves,and in tears she asks "God why?",the sky went dim
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Present.2005.Location:United States.
I was told this story when i was young,just a little kid
I didnt undertsand it until now,just like my brother did
Leared from this,i knew what mattered in the story,knew what it meant
That material things dont count,it the hard work you put in it
More important,i didnt want to hear this from anyother
Cause i heard it from the most caring person in my life...My mother
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This was a pretty good piece. It made me wanna keep reading cuz it was a good story. The imagry was pretty decent. Vocab could have been better, but it'll all good. Nice drop in here.
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This was a pretty good piece. It made me wanna keep reading cuz it was a good story and it was interesting. The imagry was pretty decent. Vocab could have been better..maybe more complex, but it'll all good. Nice drop in here.
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Meh good story but the concept is played. Your approach to the Topic Bored me. I like the imagery none the less and the story Line. Could've wrote more and at the end was kinda sad. Err your word choices could've been better. But overall Decent drop.
RTF in my OM Blood Rumors..Peace.
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good shit.... luvin tha imagery and storyline, flowed well throughout too.... I think a lil more complexity n vocab could have helped but none tha less gud shit...
-payce
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why don't you put a space in between commas and periods. it's pretty damn annoying. made me stop reading it.
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Story line was dope...kinda depressin, good shit...the flow was pretty good...better vocab could've upped the overall impact of it...but it was good...the imagery was good though and added a lot to the peice...good shit..peace
-Play-Boy
