Me against ma G

Ma wap m8z an mc n he challenged another mc 4 a battle 1nce so i said i`d battle instead, this is the piece i came upwith..

Runin 2 da mic pas now itz ma turn, i´l getchu freakd out, make ur stomach churn\
u´l b meltn of jealousy, ur insydz´l burn, cz c iv got da talent 4 wich all ´a u´z yearn..\

Yo u cald 4 a battle im ready ru ready? homiez hold on tight n we´l try n take dis steady\
dnt mistake me 4 a softie cz i ent got no balz, datz an unda estimate, i hav force lyk niagra falz..\

Dis tym wen i rap i wna do it lyk a pro, da rhythmz in ma head, letz try n make dis flow\
barE wit me ppl, dis gyalyz kinda slow, ah wot da heck churinz mamiz runin da show! Haha..!\

Wen i rap 4ma homiez i leav em all impresd, yo dnt luk away boy, u js put me2da test
\u knw im 2gud so y u mesn wid da best? pik up ur ratlez son, go get urslf sme rest..\

I dnt label moi ´MC´ im js a low down rapa, bt unlyk u proz ma lyricz dnt go crapa\
4rm groovy2 groov´ier am a bigshot, a dapa, bt uh dnt eva tink wrong, dnt u cal me a sl4ppa..\

Cz i ent cheap lyk a h03 who selz at 2peny price,
dnt asume im a game dat can b playd ova dice\
or a piece´ a cake wer u can pik ur slice, eva make dat mistake n ul b payin a price..\

Now im endn ma lyricz cz ma lil crowdz faintn, or hav i takn u2 heavn, uv got intoxicatn\
leav ur comentz dwn, gwan js gime a ratin, bt ah i knw ma score so bring on ma next battle datin...!!!!!

if ya say i need 2 giv feedbak or woteva then iv payed it 2 corupt, profit, trem or summat n warchild ayt?

I like it. Nice and quick. This line: ah wot da heck churinz mamiz runin da show!....I liked. Good. Return tha fava on this link:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=243083

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You need 2 links to 2 open mics you've left decent feedback on or this will be closed. Read the thread at the top of the forum if you don't know how.

Thanx a bunch corrupt, johny i read it but am stil confused???????? Lol

Couldn't understand some of it but the couple lines i did looked pretty decent...aint much i could say but i liked how it flowed and rhymed...decent drop man keep it up

Thatz wot rapz all about, not makin sense? Lol it happenz cheerz anyway

Wasnt feeling this piece, this was supposed to be a battle verse but the punches were way to weak to beat anyone even the wackest writers on Om wouldnt of been worried by this piece. Most of them leave good feed on your piece cause your a girl and they probably think there gonna get with you lol.
But this was just too weak vocab was sloppy look at the way you typed it it looks like Ali G language if you wrote it properly maybe it would of been slightly better because it was a chore to read. My advice is work on your spelling keep your lines into bar form so its easier to read. If you wanna know how to write punches and metaphors check my last Om out:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=243081

Ya Punchlinez Was Str8 Some Was Kinda Weak, Flow Was Coo, And i Was Feelin Ya Rhyme Scheme No Doubt...

Overall Diz Was iight...

Get Bak At Me Yo

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Ta da profit but how do i get back 2 ya? N war child fuk off go chek my comment under ur rap! I didnt dis my oponent coz i respect him 2 much n if u read his lyricz ud b ashamed at yer own so hah! i woz js showin off confidenc in this piece....

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