umm im new? tell me what you think

when i pick up the mic u can start the subtraction
cos im a threat to your life like adverse reaction
and i stick it to your crew like ion attraction
i can bring it in halves or whole like mathematical fractions
now start the retractions
because im takin it back
and thanks to all those that said what i spitted was wack
now i start the attack
like a natural
all this talk like I am bashful
i snatch souls quicker than a spinning axel
u know what happens to bodies that dont got a soul?
they get damned to hades where they under my control
which is basically hell
for your reticulum cell
id like to drink the blood that propelled from your head swell
id hang tounges on the wall for my ideal occupation
and leave u misunderstood like u got mental retardation
u wack mc's move to cellars for deep contimplation
and then once u spit want a standing ovation
my revelation
predicts my lyrical prodigy
make u commit suicide like the sirens did in oddessy
i gotta make a confession
killin' mc's is my ultimate profession
don't blame me cos u rap with viewer discretion
try to battle me and get made into an urban legend.

that shit was tight mad props needed a lil work on the structure u no and that shit was deap i like that shit keep elevatin that was chill
is u a free agent

thanks man... i have some of my shit lyin around so thought i would just post it and see what i people thought... all criticisim is greatly appericated... and i dont know what you mean by free agent but prolly

yeah u is so if u down go post a tryout in DARK SIDE CLIQ tyrout page in the crews and hook up part and ill let u in ight holla or just tell me if u want in now and ill add
u ight holla

ill go post a try out and see what yall think thanks for the hook hommie

ight no problem we sshould collab on a song ight hit me up

I think you need to read the rules before you post again.

Closed.