fuck this poem
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fuck this poem
Awesome.
Yeah, your right, I could relate... To some, not all..
These were my most related to lines, not most, exactly:
i wanted to kill myself before, how much confidence can i own?
girlfriend hates me so much, she wont even pick up the phone
did what she insisted so many times, i looked in the mirror
see u have no idea what i feel, immaturities just in the way
yah i could find another girl, then break her heart at someday
cuz ill never get over you, this will be the biggest regret ever
always thought i was an idiot, till u called me smart and clever
i dont deserve good, a problem with hurtin ppl's always been my case
there should be a line up around the block, just to spit in my face
^ word, loved 'em.
Good job Schiz. Enjoyed the read.
Lol
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this was tight the flow was hot as well, i feel what you saying on this verse for real
sometimes the lines didnt seem to rhyme but you did okay vocab use was very basic so try to work on your vocab area
loved the topic but you should have added more emotion to the shit but either way, i was feeling yo shit
aye this was pretty sick....vocab was good...in a couple of line sthe multis in there was nutz!
like for example:
"now ur free, n' came to the conclusion lovin me is worthless
so from here on, in ur book, everythin we had was worth shit
i dont even know what im doing, im writing line after line
only reason u were still there is cuz ur love was just blind"
this was tight....u followed the topic well....on some points ya flow was a lil off but not by too much...voulda used more complexity to hype it up but this was a nice drop
dis was real dope cuz i could relate to alot of shit you were sayin overall dope piece nice flow n errything nuttin much i can say but good job