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R.I.P 2Pac
I kno yer listenin 'Pac, wherever u r/
Hope yer in Heaven livin it up, puffin a cigar.
Your legacy will be carried on 4 years, for generations.
Through yer music, your movies, and the Amaru foundation.
Your frustration, your salvation, and most of all your dedication.
Helped you 2 become da greatest ever, i give my congratulations.
In your writing you gave explanations, that told of your situation.
The struggle, the rap game, and your determination.
You gave many the inspiration to fulfill their dreams with aspiration.
You gave many the motivation to fullfill an obligation.
You gave information, and in a way you gave an education.
And all that was accomplished through simple communication.
Your style was an innovation, using your head, imagination.
Told stories with relaxation, but alwayz kept it true with realization.
Heard you on da radio station, the way u made money was a revelation.
The government administration didn't like you or your occupation.
But racism only gave you more aggravation.
And you came back at 'em with even more elation.
During the duration of your time, you had total domination
But the westcoast was your one and only location.
Your affiliation with Biggie was nothin more and the an altercation.
You showed him no hesitation in showing him intimidation.
The talent you instilled required serious application.
You had an unreal combination of regulation and dedication.
There will never be a duplication of you, can't even give an imitation.
You were one of a kind, you were underivative.
Sent to jail, no bail, not even probation.
Alone in da cell, in Hell, isolation.
But that didn't stop you, only gave u more emulation.
And from there you still managed to continue your operations.
But later, 5 shots your dead, it was a crucification.
Don't know if your really dead, let's hold an excavation.
Said that you'd be buried in your writing, your oral presentation.
But instead 4 some reason, there was a cremation.
I wish you weren't dead, wish there was no assassination.
Wish you were still here 2day, wish this was all a misinterpretation.
All this is why my appreciation 4 you comes with out consideration.
'Cause without you, 'Pac, I'd be nothing than a creation.
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man this was ok......bit plAYED OUT.....
but it was ok....
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics you've left decent feedback on or this will get closed. Read the thread at the top of the forum if you don't know how.
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this was a pretty good piece, a little tiring with the -ation ending on all the last words tho
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You need decent feedback, decent feedback is where you talk about the piece in some kind of detail... not something like:
dude that stuff was ill beyond belief.
keep that up and you'll get yerself a record label mayne.
good work
HOW was the piece ill beyond belief? Was it the subject matter, the vocab, the imagery? Were his multi's and sense of flow good? Expand on your comments please.
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ok johnny my bad...gimme a sec and ill expand on my feedback
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aight i left feedback on da same 2 posts and left one da same kuz i thought it wuz good feedback
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uppin fer feedback.....can u guyz dat vote leave wut u think u would grade this out of 10?
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Eeeeeeh, Man I Cant Really Break This Down.
It Was More Like A Rhythmical Biography,
Which I Wasnt Really Feeling...
In Part Because I Dont Even Like Tupac.
I Mean, If Felt The Whole Time Like You Were Just Listing Things.
So For Me It Just Started To Drone On And I Got Bord.
You Didnt Even Alow This To Reflect On Your Own Life,
Which, With The Format Of The Piece You Should Have.
Like, Related How His Work Has Influenced You Or Motivated You
... Something Along Those Lines.
The Flow Was Kinda Blah Aswell.
*Shrugs*
Just Single Syllabol Ending Rhymes For The Most Part.
And Alot Of Them Just Read Kind Of Awkward.
All In All Man It Needs Some Work.
First And For Most You Need Better Concepts Though.
This One's Kind Of Pointless And Not Many Will Want To Read It.
Just Because It Feels More Like Reading A Book Rather Than Rap.
Stay Up And Keep Elevating Man.
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i dunno dog...as far as ya lyrics, flow, and structure go...it was a tight piece...but beyond that it lacked wordplay, originality, and true feelings...u aint never know tupac and the fact is a million people have done shit like this OM over and over and over again so its definitly played out'
just kinda makes u look like another tupac wannabee on the site
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well u had a cool topic and u rhymed but u needed multis and sum mo complex and wordplay. otha than that, hott.
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No Hate~just Elevate Yadidimean Fa Sho Yadidimean Fa Sheez
