Hey Im new Just wanna spit something

Everyday getting harder but the hates getting deeper/
Just traveling to the top but the hills gettin steeper/
Lookin for the crown but it keeps on gettin teiper/
Think im goin down you can call me a keeper/
If you think im losing/
The microphone is wat im abusing/
Comin to the forked road depends on wat im choosin/
My pen and my pad is the main thing im using/
Hata;s try and stop me but i just keep cruisen/
Put down the gun and put away the vest/
Pick up the mic and see whos the best/
Yep, Yep TNS,
We Still Exploding, Its Impossible here with my balls that im holding/
My lyrical flow just keeps unlaoding/
While my lyrical skills just keeps on growing/
Fightin every battle as if it was my last/
These hata's cant hold me down if they were gravitational mass/

Aight just a lil something, tell me wat u think, say wat u gotta say, It wont offend me just only make me betta,

can't do this you need to make a real title and you need to leave 2 links on somehting you left feedback on

Then wheres a forum where you can just spit wat u want with out any of that

then go to that forum

Go to wat forum? im askin where is one

ok...


Your flow is good but you don't have a solid topic.
You need to script something with more intrest,
indepth substance. Cause it was straight boing.
One can't learn nothing from this piece or
take you serious as a writer because it's pretty
much senseless.

So next time write something worth reading.
Get a way better topic.

don't no where it's at

Aight Illus'artis, Appercaite it, Another guy told me that i needed to have more craft in it or something, but dont really kno wat that means, I was thinkin he ment more detail into it, but dont kno

yes meaning don't say alout of oringal thing's be weird and crazy

aight, so u dont kno where a forum is where u can just free style or n e thing?

nope check

Leave feed in my OM 'Mental War -Spirit Soars'


oh yeah and ur welcome..

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