Ready or Not fet lyric striker

Skribble:
Ready or Not..i'm gonna lyrically destroy you
if you wanna do that too, dog, i'll do it for you
i got skillz you havent got the talent to do it
you had lyrical skilz but you took it and threw it
seriously you have to have rappin skillz
make your lyrics burn like hot ass grillz
you just started poppin fuckin ass pillz
and truthfully man..that shit really killz
ready or not here i come to murk you
you back down..why did you virtue
Make your lyrics better, or i'll hurt you
and PS, dont fuck me wit me, bitch
cuz i'll cut ya throat if youz a snitch

Lyric striker:
ready or not i'm findin the fuckin kitten
who needs to type sumthin pre written
all my open mics are freestyle, reallly
now all you peeps must think i'm silly
but this is true, they are from my head
no thought put into them, thats what i said..
i ratyher make it challenging instead
not easy typing sumthin on paper
thats how bitches turn into a raper
Ready or not, i'll murder all the words
i can lyrcially hit peeps like birds..
you know like with a stone or sumthin
i'm not lyrcially dumb, i'm just bluntin
hahahahah just jokin around........
i got the best lyrcis in town!!!!!!!!

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nice multies
try to increase the rhyme scheme

like you rhymed bitch and snitch

not good

but overall it flowed well, try making it longer...

good drop peep Passion and Fire

son i liked it i felt ur vocab but yo just try to make the verse longer next time aight son but keep up the good work we need niggas in this site like u aight

thanks for the feed peeps i apprectiate it, uppin for sum more

The verses were ok i think with a piece like this you should of had harder funnier punches you were saying you were dope but you needed to say it in a different way. You should of had some metaphors for why your dope etc and the piece didnt have that so there was no impact in the verses.
The vocab was ok but you didnt have no stand out imagery, a piece like this needs some dark imagery or very descriptive imagery try and get nasty with the rhymes and punches then your verses will improve.

aiight, thanks for the feed man, appreciated, uppin 4 sum more

Yeah, topic was pretty good, i liked the collab shit, was nice coz it gives the readers a point to see from ya both, but i thought Skirb's verse was slighlty better, had slightly harder punches and as warchild said, metaphors culd have been used.. this was pretty nicely put and the flow was smooth aswell, descent drop. elevate on ya complexity i reckn, n keep writin

aiight, thanbks for the feed man, apprectiated, uppin for sum more

yea...need sum feed here, uppin for sum more, dont sleep