I got game

I've slumped some suckas - and even infared tuckas
quick with the steel, so you can die fast, mothafucka
Tryin' to front on me, you must be puffin' on swishas
split phillies 'til I die, you come outta pocket for bitches
my game is so vicious - nah I don't take names
but see me in the club, and I might snatch your dame
cuz you so lame - and me I'm so, so hot
I got game on the mic, and tuck a real hot glock
and a real big cock - I'm so sick with this
I got all the bitches fiendin', tryin' ta kiss on this
I know y'all missin' this - but it's aaalllllll good
pretty soon - I might come through y'aaalllll hood
yea I got that good - shorty, what you need?
you can chill in the cut, if you can twist that green
I might look mean - but girl I'm so so nice
so please holla at me if you can go all night
I'll treat you right - but best be gone in the A-M
and if you got notes, don't be thinkin' that I'mma pay 'em
I've slayed 'em - with rhymes, and on the block
you suckas must be trippin', thinkin' you can get me got
my flows so hot - I'm down to go harder for mines
you know, I make that paper off them nickels and dimes
or even squeezin' on nines - I gotta get up outta here
but if you keep on yappin', let me make this very clear
I tote guns son - I'll send hot ones
I don't even give a fuck if you got funds, dun
I might get ya on the block, motha-fuck the cops
any way you go against me, ya gonna get yo ass dropped




I don't konw how I feel about the first couple lines....don't fit like i'd like 'em to. Also the last 5 or so lines were tacked on, because I was feeling it as I typed it over. Kind of wanted to keep going, but shit seemed to be dragging, and w/e


let me know if you're feelin' this shit, and I'll return feedback if you drop a link


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238396
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=239518

one.

7 views, no votes, no feed, no anything?

c'mon now....

yo i wasnt feelin it, its a topic that is common, people dont need to know how gangster u r in a damn computer, talk about something that will have people guessin amake sure its interesting, if u continue comin to this site u will develop ok but keep it up ull get there man aight

"I've slumped some suckas - and even infared tuckas
quick with the steel, so you can die fast, mothafucka
Tryin' to front on me, you must be puffin' on swishas
split phillies 'til I die, you come outta pocket for bitches"

^^ these four line sup to flowed good...everything else below that i wasnt feeling. U coulda worded it right...not only the end ryhme words should sound nice to fit the ryhme, the words in between are important to. For example:

"my game is so vicious - nah I don't take names"
nice line,,,u could make this stand out more with a multi like..
i hold weight in the streets while ya just ( FAKE DAMES) << thats a multi it sounds hot an fits the flow lovely..

what u did:

"my game is so vicious - nah I don't take names
but see me in the club, and I might snatch your dame"
take an your are two possites it throws the flow off track..

buty this was a coo drop tho keep spitting just blessing ya

now managemnet can get off me about leaving small feed DAYUM!

thanks for the feed peeps.

yeah, every other line (with the beginning and end being the exception), the first half of the line (before the -) is really just an extension of the previous one, if that makes sense. I wish I could explain it better, there's probably a name for it, but ionno. I was puttin' some shit down in the studio a couple years ago, but I....well let's just say i got caught up the last few years.

Anyway though, been fuckin' around with a boy a mine a bit lately, so I think i'mma try to jump back in a bit, we'll see what happens tho.

anyway tho, yeah, basically it was just off the top, normally I just try to spit on a atrac or something, or at least on my comp, but it was early, and I wasn't tryin' to wake up my roommates n' shit.

anyway tho, good looks on the feedback, hopefully more ppl will keep it comin'

o yea, and i can't hardly smoke right now, i'm on paper and shit, so hopefully when i get up off this shit i can start droppin' some real shit again.

one.

You need a proper title and you dont poll OM's.

Why not, if the dog wanna poll let him poll, i reckon u can do better than this, dog. keep it comin'

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Originally Posted by Pakaveli

Why not, if the dog wanna poll let him poll, i reckon u can do better than this, dog. keep it comin'

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word. I'll blaze something up tomorrow.

Also, yea, I looked in the rules, nothing about poll's, and so I said shit, poll it up.

as for a title...shit, this is really just off the top, so I had to title it something....I'm not just trying to claim hard on my shit or something, that's just what I called it.

it was aight

anyone else?

bump.

it wuz aight, your flo and struc needs to be elevated okay so improve on that shit nahmean and anotha thing, thiz thru me off a lil but it wa sdecent nothin to big but it was itght for ya 1st om jus elevate on better vocab and flo

didnt like ur structure
but it had ite flow

almost feelin it

good looks again. I wrote a lil' something quick earlier that I'll drop tomorrow.

holla